The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Every country in the world is suffering from some sort of environmental crisis, which is worseningexacerbating each year. In my view, individual effort is less significant in reducing such damagedamages; hence, governments, international organisations and large corporationsthe government, international organisations and big corporations should come forward to tackle these escalating environmental problemsthis ever-increasing global warming and environmental issues. Environmental damage is an intricate issue that primarily results from careless industrialisation. Most factories release chemicals into the environment without any treatment and emit CO2. So, they are liable for such devastating environmental degradation, and they should provide sufficient fundingpay all the money to restorereinstate the environment. To give an example, according to the World Economic Forum, industrial waste isindustrial wastes are a key cause ofthe key reason for the contemporary ecological collapse, and it accounts for 70%it comprises 70% of the world’s pollutionpollutions. Since industries are primarily responsible for global warming, they should be required to investmade liable to invest in reversing this damageto reverse it. Moreover, pollution is wreaking havoc in all countries. As countries are inextricably connected, they can not neglect their dutydeny their duties to resolve the issue. When Antarctic icethe iceberg in Antarctica melts, it increases the risk of floodingthe risks of floods in the low-lying countrieslower sea-level countries like Bangladesh, Sri Lanka and the Maldives. Interestingly, 80% of global warming is happening due to excessive fuel useusages in developed countries. So rich countries should reduce their fuel consumption to limit the global temperature rise so that other countries become free from any environmental risksenvironment-related jeopardies. Governments, international organisations and large corporations have the means and capacity to tackle it internationally, and ordinary people can do little to enact international laws or take effective initiatives to reverse the damage done. In conclusion, the intensity of environmental damagethe environmental damages has reached its peak, so individual efforts cannot change it significantly. In fact, large organizations and governments should resolve the issue because they are responsible for most of the damagedamages, and they have the means to control it.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response establishes a clear position and supports it with relevant discussion of industrial responsibility, international effects, and the greater capacity of institutions to act. However, its reasoning sometimes relies on sweeping or insufficiently explained claims, while awkward word choices and the absence of paragraph breaks weaken precision and readability. The priority is to organize the main arguments into distinct paragraphs and develop each claim with careful, credible explanation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the question directly and develops relevant reasons for assigning primary responsibility to governments and large organizations.
Qualify broad factual claims and explain more precisely why institutional action is more effective than individual action.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a broadly logical sequence, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph obscures the separation of its main ideas.
Use distinct introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with each body paragraph centred on one clearly developed reason.
Lexical Resource
The response displays good range, but recurrent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce precision despite generally clear meaning.
Replace awkward expressions such as pluralized uncountable nouns and imprecise environmental terms with natural academic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentences is attempted successfully, though agreement, reference, and noun-form errors recur across the response.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement, pronoun reference, and countable versus uncountable noun forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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