Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Education and health are fundamental factors for any nation. Research shows that the gap that exists between the level of education in rich and poor countries has a tendency to increase over timewith the time. I completely agree that the governments of richer nations should take action to help poorer nations overcomestep forward to help the poor nations to overcome the obstacles they face in areas like healthcare, education and trade. Education, health and trade are interconnectedinterconnected with each other and that is why an increase in educational level iswill very likely to affect both health and trade. Many industrialised rich countries have enough resources at their disposal in order to help poorer countries. Nowadays there are plenty of organisationsplenty organisations funded by prosperous countries thatprosperous countries, which focus on helping developing countriesthird world countries by sending workers and volunteers to poorer nations to support their developmentto the poor nations in order to help the development. Many even providegrant medical equipment and other necessary goods. Another way in whichAnother way how rich countries help is by providinggiving loans for development. However, many governmentsHowever many governments refuse to give financial aida financial aid due to the high risk involved. However, there is another side to the issueBut there is always a flip side of the coin and the governments of such rich countries that helpgovernment of such rich countries who help the poor nations should make sure that the fundsfund they provide is utilised properly. Alternatively, they should undertake projectstake schemes like establishing schools, commercial facilitiesplaces and hospitals under their direct authorityin their authority rather than providing fundsproviding the fund to these poor nations. In conclusion, governments should unite and take more responsibility for providing help to poor countries. Otherwise, the gap between poor and rich countries will continue to grow exponentially.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear view that richer governments should help poorer nations and identifies several practical mechanisms, including volunteers, equipment, loans, and directly managed projects. Its main limitation is that the health, education, and trade dimensions are not developed evenly, while the single-block structure and recurring language errors weaken clarity. Prioritise separate, specific examples for each development area and organise them into focused paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is supported by several relevant forms of assistance, though trade receives little specific development and examples remain general.
Explain one concrete intervention in health, education, and trade, showing how richer governments' responsibility would improve each area.
Coherence and Cohesion
The reasoning moves broadly from need to methods and oversight, but the single paragraph and some abrupt links weaken organisation.
Separate the case for responsibility, practical assistance, and accountability into focused paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of development vocabulary, with several inaccurate or awkward collocations.
Replace phrases such as 'plenty organisations', 'grant medical equipment', 'give a financial aid', and 'take schemes'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear through varied structures, although errors in articles, verb patterns, relative clauses, and punctuation recur.
Practise article use with countable nouns and accurate patterns after modal and causative verbs.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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