Many people believe that inherent talent is more important than practice in many fields like sport or music. According to them great musicians and sportsmen are born and can’t be created. However, others claim that talent has little to do with success and any child can be taught to become a great sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
It is a frequently debated issuefact that some people are genetically gifted with certain abilitiesgifted with some abilities in their genetic, but Deletethe others do not have such exceptional talentthis kind of prodigiousness. By contrast, some people think that any person can become a successfulany person could be a successful musician or sportsman through education, practice and proper guidanceby education, practice and proper guideline.
On the one hand, each individual has an aptitude for a specific fielda tendency on a specific field of Deleteart or a science. However, a minority of them are geniuses who achieve outstanding success in their fieldsshow off a splendid success on their jobs. For instance, most of the investors, such as Einstein, Newton, Edison and Graham bell. They were geniuses and had innategenetically intellectual capacity far greater than that of other peoplemuch more than the other people. Furthermore, these successful peoplethis kind of successful people could be seen in sports and music as wellin sports and music also. Messi and Mozart are good examples ofthe good examples for accomplished sportspeople and musiciansachieved sportsman and musician. Thus, some people could be Deletemore capable than the others in certain areas.
On the other hand, some people think that every child could be a successful person through education. In other words, success results from educationsuccess is behind the education, continuous practice and hard workcontinuous practices and working hard. The abilities that people have do not provide a differentiation on the achievements of them. The difference among the people’s success is derived from the quality of education that they got. Thus, any person who was in the same positionany person who were the same position and had a similar education would be able to indicate awesome performance.
Finally, each person has different kinds of abilities, skills, talents in different areas. The abilities, skills and tendencies of children detected in early ages and children should get an education in the fields that they have the tendency. Thus, both nurture and nature are effective on the success of people.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents both perspectives in a clear paragraph structure and ultimately gives a relevant, balanced opinion. Its main limitation is that support is sometimes imprecise or only loosely relevant, while frequent awkward word choices and grammatical errors reduce fluency. The highest priority is to develop each view with directly relevant reasoning and examples expressed in accurate, natural language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and the writer's opinion are addressed, but several supporting points are general, loosely relevant, or insufficiently explained.
Develop one precise reason and one directly relevant sport or music example for each view before reaching the opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses through a recognizable introduction, two-sided discussion, and conclusion, although links within ideas can be mechanical or abrupt.
Use complete topic-led paragraphs and make the logical relationship between each example and its main claim explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is some range and an attempt at less common vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices weaken precision.
Replace unnatural phrases such as "success is behind the education" with simpler, conventional academic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent article, agreement, preposition, and sentence-completion errors reduce control.
Prioritize complete sentence structures and systematically check subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions during revision.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people believe that inherent talent is more important than practice in many fields like sport or music. According to them great musicians and sportsmen are born and can’t be created. However, others claim that talent has little to do with success and any child can be taught to become a great sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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