Some people think that technology has made our life too complex. However, other people think that it has made our life easier. What is your viewpoint?
Sample Response
In my view, technology has made life easier and at the same time, it has made our life somehow complicated. We can't say it has made our life too complex because it is of the person's decisiveness to choose whether they want an easy or a complicated life, but it would fit to say it has made our life complicated in a certain manner to the extent that we have no control over some of its outcomes. For instance, technology has a role to play in air pollution and there is no way we can run away from pollution since it is a worldwide issue and as long as air pollution is there, each and every individual alive on this planet will suffer the consequences of this bad side of technology whether they like it or not. Although most agree that technology has made our life easier, they have failed to make the most use out of it and its benefits. The benefits of technology go beyond transportation, communication and entertainment. Especially in the 21st century, technology is found in our day to day life. It has become an answer to most of our questions and a solution to most of our problems. It creates the atmosphere of comfort in a depressing era. Technological products such as cars, refrigerators, aeroplanes and stoves are some of the good examples to show how technology can simplify one's life. In general, we can conclude that technology is a way of making life easy.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Natural adverb Original: somehow complicated Suggested revision: somewhat complicated Why it matters: “Somewhat” is the more natural adverb here.
- 2. Clarify phrase Original: it is of the person's decisiveness Suggested revision: it depends on a person's decision Why it matters: The original phrase is unnatural and unclear.
- 3. Agreement Original: whether they want Suggested revision: whether he or she wants Why it matters: The subject should agree with “a person,” or the sentence should be made plural.
- 4. Use idiom correctly Original: it would fit to say Suggested revision: it would be fair to say Why it matters: This is the natural expression.
- 5. Academic wording Original: run away from pollution Suggested revision: escape pollution Why it matters: This is more concise and academic.
- 6. Be concise Original: each and every individual alive on this planet Suggested revision: everyone on the planet Why it matters: The original phrase is wordy and overemphatic.
- 7. Correct collocation Original: make the most use out of it Suggested revision: make full use of it Why it matters: This is the standard collocation.
- 8. Hyphenate compound Original: day to day life Suggested revision: day-to-day life Why it matters: Hyphenate the compound adjective before a noun.
- 9. Article use Original: It creates the atmosphere Suggested revision: It creates an atmosphere Why it matters: A singular countable noun needs an article.
- 10. Conclusion phrasing Original: In general, we can conclude Suggested revision: Overall, I would argue Why it matters: This gives a more direct conclusion and avoids a formulaic phrase.
- 11. Sentence rewrite Original: In my view, technology has made life easier and at the same time, it has made our life somehow complicated. Suggested revision: In my view, technology has made life easier overall, although it has also made some aspects of life more complicated. Why it matters: This states the mixed position more precisely.
- 12. Sentence rewrite Original: We can't say it has made our life too complex because it is of the person's decisiveness to choose whether they want an easy or a complicated life, but it would fit to say it has made our life complicated in a certain manner to the extent that we have no control over some of its outcomes. Suggested revision: We cannot say that technology has made life too complex, because its effect partly depends on how people choose to use it; however, some outcomes are beyond individual control. Why it matters: The rewrite fixes the long sentence and clarifies the logic.
Suggested Rewrites
- somehow complicated somewhat complicated
- it is of the person's decisiveness it depends on a person's decision
- whether they want whether he or she wants
- it would fit to say it would be fair to say
- run away from pollution escape pollution
- each and every individual alive on this planet everyone on the planet
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
The response gives a clear mixed viewpoint and relevant examples, especially pollution and household technologies. However, it is short on development and does not fully analyse why technology makes life easier or complex.
Develop two balanced body paragraphs: one on unavoidable complexity and one on practical convenience, then state which side is stronger.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is presented as one paragraph and the progression is hard to scan. Ideas move from complexity to benefits, but transitions and paragraph control are limited.
Separate the introduction, complexity argument, easier-life argument, and conclusion into four paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally sufficient and sometimes flexible, but several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Use natural phrases such as “partly complicated,” “a matter of personal choice,” “make full use of,” and “part of everyday life.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is some complex sentence use, but very long sentences create control problems and several phrases have awkward grammar.
Break long sentences into shorter ones and check prepositions after phrases such as “agree that,” “part of,” and “make use of.”