Some people say that people remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why do you think that is?
Sample Response
A gift is always special, but areis there any special gifts one would remember? My answer would be a definite yes. Special gifts are always treasured and cared forfondled and nurtured no matter how old they gethow old it gets. An ideal exampleexemplification supporting this ideacontext would be a gift from your loved ones.
Gifts always favour a better place for two hearts - the one gifting and the other being gifted, in my experience one gift I am going to nurture for the lifetime would be the birth of my daughter. Another would be a gift from my wife on our anniversaryon an anniversary day. These are always remembered and cherished because these gifts have madebecause these gifts made an indelible impact on my mind. Remembering things, though not unique to humans, we are only living creature which can distinguish and remember, human physiology explains it better. Anything special always procures a place in our brain, which can be retrieved when needed.
In some cases, it is not the person but the present itself that is valued more. For example, a student may be nameda student awarded as the best cadet of the year. Such gifts that one receives in childhood are most likely to influence their futureinfluence him for future. Another case of influential gifts would be an object or animalan object or living being that stays with youthat is going to stay with you for a long time. An example would be my case when the puppy that I got gifted from my mother at age of fifteen went on stay as my best friend further. The next category of giftsNext category of gifts remembered would be one that was always out of reachout of reach always; a person of modest meansa mediocre person being given an expensive carbeing gifted with an expensive car which he never dreamt of buying would serve as an examplewould serve an example. Though it is said that gifts should not be valued or weighed, some gifts like the expensive car earn a place in our memoryreserve place in our memory mainly because of its market valuemainly on its market value or price.
In general, people remember gifts that become special in their life, few examples are mentioned above. This process is a part of human nature as we are made of such complex emotional bindings with objects or things that could give us pleasure.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response offers several relevant explanations, especially emotional attachment, lasting influence, personal significance, and monetary value, supported by varied personal examples. However, the argument is loosely developed and frequent awkward wording, run-on sentences, and grammatical errors make parts of it difficult to follow. The highest-priority improvement is to organize two or three clear reasons and explain each in accurate, natural sentences before adding an example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses why gifts are remembered through several relevant reasons, but some examples are questionable and the explanations are often imprecise.
Select a few distinct reasons, such as emotional association, rarity, and lasting usefulness, and clearly explain how each strengthens memory.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a recognizable introduction, body development, and conclusion, but ideas within paragraphs are loosely connected and progression is sometimes difficult to follow.
Give each body paragraph one controlling reason and use shorter linking sentences to connect the explanation to its example.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts a reasonably broad vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate choices such as ‘fondled’, ‘procures a place’, and ‘emotional bindings’ impair natural expression.
Use familiar, precise collocations such as ‘cherished’, ‘remains in our memory’, and ‘emotional attachment’ instead of forcing uncommon words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, relative clauses, and verb forms reduce clarity.
Separate run-on sentences and check every clause for a complete subject-verb structure, correct articles, and consistent singular or plural agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that people remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why do you think that is?
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