Some people say that people remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why do you think that is?
Sample Response
Receiving gifts is always exciting and many people remember particular giftsmany people remember the gift for a long time. I think that all people like to receive presents from their relatives, friends, co-workers, and people they love and care about.care about etc. Personally, I am sure that a person does not remember all the gifts he receives because remembering every gift is impossiblebecause it is impossible. However, I think that all people remember some gifts that were special to them. There are many reasons why people rememberreasons for people to remember those special gifts.
First of all, I believe that people remember special gifts because they camewere from people who were very close to themvery close and dear people. For example, I remember that my parents gave meI remember my parents gave me a ring when I was sixteen years old. It was not an expensive ring but it was very valuable for me and when I left my home and moved to another city, I often looked at that ring and felt like my parents were somewhere near me. I felt their support, care, love and understanding. It is like people who are close to us give their small parts of their souls with that gift. They want us to remember them andThey want us to remember them and they want to make us happy. Gifts sometimes remind us ofremind us the memory of a certain time. For example, if a child gets a toy at an early age and seesat an early age and if he sees it when he grows older, it reminds them of their childhoodit reminds him about the childhood. Besides, special gifts always remind us of the care and loveremind us the caring and love of the person who gave themit. These gifts are very valuable for people of all countries and nationalities. Another reason why people remember special gifts is thatAnother reason why people remember special gifts because they were exactly what people wanted to have for a long time, but for some reasonreasons, they just could not afford those things or they did not buy them. So, when they receive those things as gifts it makes them very happy and they remember those moments for a long time. When I was a child, my motherWhen I was a child my mother could not buy me a bicycle because we did not have enough money at that time. So, when my grandfather bought me my first bicycle, itwhen my grandfather bought me my first bicycle it was the happiest moment in my life. Moreover, he personally taught me how to ride and I spent all my spare time after that cyclingdoing cycling.
To sum up, I think that people remember special gifts because they are given with love and care and comepresented with love, care and come from special people.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response answers the question directly and develops its reasons through vivid personal examples of a ring and a bicycle, making the central explanation convincing and memorable. The main limitation is a long, repetitive body paragraph accompanied by frequent awkward phrasing and grammatical slips. The highest-priority improvement is to separate the two reasons into focused paragraphs and edit each for concise, idiomatic expression and sentence control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives clear, relevant reasons for remembering gifts and develops them effectively through detailed personal examples, despite some repetition and broad claims.
Make each reason distinct and conclude its example by explicitly explaining how it causes the gift to remain memorable.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically from emotional significance to receiving a long-desired item, but almost all development is compressed into one lengthy body paragraph.
Use one body paragraph for sentimental associations and another for long-desired gifts, removing repeated statements about love and memory.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for emotions, relationships, and memories, though repetition and inaccurate combinations such as 'remind us the memory' reduce precision.
Use natural collocations such as 'evoke a memory', 'remind us of childhood', and 'go cycling', while varying repeated words such as 'special' and 'remember'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a range of subordinate clauses and remains clear, but frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, referencing, and prepositions weaken accuracy.
Edit long sentences into controlled units and check pronoun agreement, relative clauses, and verb-preposition patterns throughout.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that people remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why do you think that is?
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