The chart below illustrates the percentages of sales of one bookseller in 1970, 1997 and 2012.
Sample Response
The pie charts illustrate the percentages of book salessales percentages of books across five genres sold by a bookseller in 1972, 1992 and 2012from 1972 to 2012.
Overall, it is evident that the proportion of adult fiction salesAdult fiction book sales increased over the years, while the sales of Biography books exhibited a declining trend.
Initially, in 1972, the ‘Other’ books category had the largest share of salesdominated the market, comprising approximately 25% of total sales. In contrast, Adult fiction, Children’s fiction, and Biography books each represented 20% of total sales. Travel books constituted a smaller segment at 15%. By 1992, Adult fiction had taken the lead in sales at 25%, while Children’s fiction and the ‘Other’ category each accounted for 22% and 20%, respectivelyaround 20% of total sales. In the same year, Travel and Biography books made up 18% and 15% of sales, respectively.
By 2012, Adult fiction books constituted 45% of book sales. Additionally, Children’s fiction represented 25% of the market. Both Travel and ‘Other’ book categories saw a decrease, each accounting for about 10% of total sales. In contrast, BiographyBiographies had the smallest share of sales at just 8%.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is clear, well organised, and impressively comprehensive, with accurate reporting of almost every category and a concise overview of the dominant trends. Its main limitation is that the overview highlights only adult fiction and biography, while the substantial growth in children's fiction and the fall in other books are left implicit. Prioritise a fuller overview that groups the most important movements before presenting details.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and covers all five genres with figures that are accurate apart from minor approximations.
Broaden the overview to include the rise in children's fiction and the marked decline in other books.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview through the three years, with clear paragraphing and well-controlled linking.
Vary the openings of detail sentences slightly to make the progression even more fluid.
Lexical Resource
A varied and precise range of language describes proportions, rankings, and changes effectively.
Reduce repetition of sales and use the chart's category labels consistently for maximum precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex and simple sentence forms are used accurately, with consistently strong control of grammar and punctuation.
Continue refining clause variety while keeping comparisons as concise as they are here.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below illustrates the percentages of sales of one bookseller in 1970, 1997 and 2012.
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