The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Sample Response
The pie chart depicts the usage ratio of different types of transportations in Edmonton and the table illustrates the purpose of using cars in the same area. It is clear that the car is the most popular while rail is the second most preferred transportation types among the people in Edmonton. As is seen in the pie chart almost half of the Edmontonians use cars for their transportation while more than one-third of them rely on the Light Rail Transit or LTR. One out of ten of them uses bus while the same proportion of these people takes the taxi for commuting. From the table, it is evident that the majority of Edmontonian people prefer cars to commute to work, for business needs and taking children to schools. Just over half of the car users travel by car to go to work, while 45% use it for business purposes. People who take their children to school in a car contribute to 40%. On the other hand, only 15% travels by car for shopping and leisure activity.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use uncountable noun Original: types of transportations Suggested revision: modes of transport Why it matters: 'Transport' is uncountable here, and 'modes' is the standard term for categories.
- 2. Use plural purpose Original: purpose Suggested revision: purposes Why it matters: The table lists several distinct reasons, so 'purposes' must be plural.
- 3. Match singular complement Original: the second most preferred transportation types Suggested revision: the second most preferred mode of transport Why it matters: 'Rail' is one singular mode, so the complement must also be singular.
- 4. Correct the acronym Original: Light Rail Transit or LTR Suggested revision: Light Rail Transit, or LRT Why it matters: The chart labels the mode as LRT, not LTR.
- 5. Correct transport phrase Original: One out of ten of them uses bus Suggested revision: One in ten of them uses the bus Why it matters: The idiomatic proportion is 'one in ten', and the transport noun requires 'the'.
- 6. Use natural phrasing Original: same proportion of these people takes the taxi Suggested revision: same proportion takes a taxi Why it matters: The shorter subject is clear, and an individual journey takes 'a taxi'.
- 7. Use singular institution Original: schools Suggested revision: school Why it matters: 'School' is singular when referring generally to the institutional destination.
- 8. Use percentage collocation Original: contribute to 40% Suggested revision: account for 40% Why it matters: A group 'accounts for' a stated percentage.
- 9. Use chart terminology Original: usage ratio Suggested revision: proportions Why it matters: The pie chart presents proportions rather than a single usage ratio.
- 10. Name the location Original: area Suggested revision: city Why it matters: 'City' identifies Edmonton more precisely than the vague noun 'area'.
- 11. Use generic plural Original: the car is the most popular Suggested revision: cars are the most popular Why it matters: A plural form is natural when referring to a transport mode generally.
- 12. Use concise demonym Original: among the people in Edmonton Suggested revision: among Edmonton residents Why it matters: The concise noun phrase avoids unnecessary wording.
Suggested Rewrites
- types of transportations modes of transport
- purpose purposes
- the second most preferred transportation types the second most preferred mode of transport
- Light Rail Transit or LTR Light Rail Transit, or LRT
- One out of ten of them uses bus One in ten of them uses the bus
- same proportion of these people takes the taxi same proportion takes a taxi
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview and accurately reports every transport share and every stated reason for car use, making the main comparisons easy to understand. Its chief limitation is language control: awkward nouns, a mislabeled abbreviation, and recurring agreement errors reduce precision despite strong data coverage. Prioritise natural transport terminology and careful checking of singular and plural verb forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview accurately identifies the two leading transport modes, and the response covers all pie-chart shares and car-use purposes with correct figures.
Refine the table overview by stating that commuting is the only purpose used by a majority, while shopping and leisure are jointly lowest.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the transport distribution to reasons for car use, although the single paragraph and repetitive reporting structure limit refinement.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping the pie-chart comparison apart from the ranked car-use purposes.
Lexical Resource
A reasonable range of transport and comparison vocabulary is used, but inaccurate forms such as 'transportations,' 'LTR,' and 'contribute to 40%' reduce precision.
Use consistent terms such as 'modes of transport,' 'LRT,' 'accounted for,' and 'travelled by car.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied comparative sentences communicate the figures clearly, though errors with articles, agreement, plurals, and prepositions occur regularly.
Check agreement in forms such as 'one in ten uses' and 'only 15% travel,' and revise awkward noun phrases involving purpose.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
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