The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Sample Response
The given data showshows the types and reasonsthe type and reason for transport usethe transportation used in Edmonton. According to the given information, the car was the most common transportation type used by the people of EdmontonEdmond and work and business purposes werework and business purpose was the two main reasonsthe main two reasons they travelled. In general, people of Edmonton travelled mostly for work, business and to takereach their children to school and they used mostly cars and light rail transitcars and rails for that. As is presented in the pie chart and table, cars accounted for 45% of journeys45% of travel was made by cars whereas the light rail transit accounted for 35%was used 35%. These two were the most widely used transport modeshighest used transportation types used by the people of Edmonton. Bus and taxiTaxi were both used for 10% of journeys10% of the total travel which was much lowerlesser than the use of car and light rail transportcar and rail transportations. According to the table data, most people travelled to commute to work and the percentage of it was 55. The second-highestThe send the highest percentage of people travelled for the business purpose which was 10% less than the work commuting reason. For shopping and leisure activity 15% of people travelled and to take children to their school was another reason people travelled which accounted for 40% of car useoccupies 40% of their total travel.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response selects all the main figures accurately and provides a useful overview of the dominant transport modes and reasons for car use. Its impact is reduced by one-paragraph organisation and frequent awkward or erroneous phrasing, including a garbled comparison of work and business. Prioritise clearer paragraphing and controlled comparative sentences so the accurate data is communicated more fluently.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately covers every transport share and car-use reason, with an overview identifying the principal patterns.
Make the overview more precise by distinguishing the transport-mode chart from the table, which concerns reasons for car use only.
Coherence and Cohesion
The charts are discussed in a logical sequence, but the single paragraph and some repetitive linking make progression less effective.
Create distinct introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs, grouping the pie-chart and table comparisons separately.
Lexical Resource
There is enough topic vocabulary to describe modes, purposes, and comparisons, although several choices are awkward or inaccurate.
Use natural forms such as 'transport modes', 'take children to school', and 'lower than' instead of 'transportations', 'reach their children', and 'lesser than'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but frequent agreement, article, and clause errors sometimes disrupt fluency and precision.
Practise controlled comparison sentences and proofread malformed clauses, especially the sentence introducing the second-highest purpose.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
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