The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Sample Response
The provided pie chart illustrates four different modes of transportation used by Edmonton citizens and their motivations for using the car in this city. Overall, the car iswas the primary means of transportation for Edmonton citizens and rail iswas more popular among them than taxis and busesthan the taxi and bus. As shown in the pie chartAs is observed from the given diagram, 45%approximately half of the respondentstotal travellers used a carpreferred to go by car. However, the possible reason to travel by car was to go to the job which was 55%, followed by business (45%) and taking children to school (40%). Interestingly, it was least prioritised while they went for shopping and leisure activities using their cars. In additionBesides, 35% used Light Rail Transit35% of the citizens commuted by Light Rail Transit while bus and taxi were used equallywhereas bus and taxi were equally used by people in Edmontonthe Edmonton people at 10% eachwith 10% both. The chart also shows thatIt is obvious that people in Edmonton city preferred Light Rail Transit over the taxistaxies and buses as the share using rail far exceededrail commuters well exceeded the bus and taxi users in this city.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report gives an accurate overview, covers all four transport shares, and correctly ranks the main reasons for car use. Its strongest feature is the clear comparison between cars, light rail, buses, and taxis; the main limitation is repetitive organisation and slightly vague reporting of shopping and leisure. Prioritise concise grouping and include their shared figure directly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The key patterns and almost all figures are accurately selected, with only the exact 15% values for shopping and leisure left unstated.
Report that shopping and leisure were jointly the lowest reasons at 15% each, and distinguish clearly between transport shares and reasons for car use.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview to reasons and mode shares, but the final light-rail comparison unnecessarily repeats the overview.
Use separate detail paragraphs for the pie chart and table, ending after each dataset's most useful comparison.
Lexical Resource
The response has a sufficient range of transport and comparison vocabulary, though several expressions are awkward or slightly inaccurate.
Prefer 'commuting to work', 'the least common reasons', '10% each', and the plural 'taxis'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most sentences are clear and varied, with occasional problems in pronoun reference, prepositions, and comparative phrasing.
Use explicit subjects for each dataset and revise structures such as '55% used cars to commute to work'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
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