The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast food in Britain. The graph shows the trends in the consumption of fast foods.
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the money spent on six consumer goods in four European countries such as Britain, France, Italy and Germany.
Overall it can be seen that Britain spent the most moneythe most amount of money on every consumer goodgoods compared with the other countriesthan the other countries whilst Germany spent the least money on goods of the four countriesamong the other countries.
In Britain, more than 170,000 pounds sterlingabove 170 thousand pounds sterling wasare spent on photographic film as well as toys and CDs at more thanCDs on above 165 thousand pounds sterling. In FranceIn terms of France, tennis racquets, perfumes and personal stereos are the items on which consumersthey spent the least money less than 145,000 pounds on each itembelow 145000 pounds altogether.
On the other hand, consumers in ItalyItalian people spent the most money on toys, perfumes and tennis racquets, up to 155,000 poundsup to 155000 pounds whereas Germany spent the least on toys and CDs and spent a small amount on perfumes and tennis racquets, up to 150,000 poundsup to 150 pounds, however, Germany considered as the money spent less on all consumer goods among all the other countries.
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response has a recognizable report structure and uses topic-related comparative language, but it describes six consumer goods in four European countries rather than the two fast-food charts provided. This complete mismatch means the visual task is not addressed, while frequent grammatical and collocational problems further weaken clarity. The highest priority is to analyse the attached charts directly, summarizing expenditure by income group and consumption trends from 1970 to 1990.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response is entirely unrelated to the attached fast-food charts and therefore does not address the task or report any relevant features.
Base the report on the supplied visuals, covering spending by income group and changes in hamburger, fish-and-chip, and pizza consumption.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has an evident introduction, overview, and body structure, but progression becomes repetitive and the final sentence is an overloaded run-on.
Organize details into two focused comparison paragraphs and split long sentences so each comparison has a clear purpose.
Lexical Resource
There is some range of comparative and data-reporting vocabulary, but frequent imprecise collocations and inconsistent units limit accuracy.
Use precise expressions for expenditure and comparison, and check that every unit and quantity is stated consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and clause control sometimes make relationships difficult to follow.
Build shorter accurate comparison sentences first, then combine them only when conjunctions and verb forms remain controlled.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast food in Britain. The graph shows the trends in the consumption of fast foods.
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