The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
Sample Response
The pie charts illustrateillustrates energy generation fromfrom from five different sources in France in 1995 and 2005in two years 1995 and 2005.
It is clear that while the percentages of energy produced from coal, gas, nuclear power and other sourcesCoal, Gas, Nuclear and Other sources increased, the reverse was true for Petrol over the period shown. Additionally, Coal and Gas were the two most significant sources of energymeans of energy production in this country during the period shownduring the research period.
In 1995, Coal was the primary source of energy in France with the figure registering nearly 30%, while Gas and Petrol accounted for 29.63% and 29.27% of total energywere used to create 29.63% and 29.27% of the total energy respectively. In contrast, only 4.9% of the total energy was generatedmanufactured from other sources compared with 6.4% from nuclear powerby Nuclear power.
In 2005, the proportions of energy generated from Coal and Gas rose slightlyinsignificantly to 30.93% and 30.31% respectively. By contrast, much less energy was produced from Petrol as illustrated by a dramatic fall of nearly 10% to only 19.55%. Meanwhile, there were considerable increases in the figures for Nuclear and Other sources to 10.10% and 9.10% respectively.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response provides a clear overview, accurately reports every energy category in both years, and makes the important comparisons efficiently. Its main limitation is a small cluster of grammatical and lexical slips, especially in the introduction and in descriptions such as energy being 'manufactured'; the highest-priority improvement is careful proofreading for agreement, duplication, and natural data-reporting collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and supporting figures accurately cover all five sources and clearly identify the dominant categories and principal change.
Refine the description of the small coal and gas rises by calling them slight rather than insignificant.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organised into an introduction, overview, and two well-focused detail paragraphs with clear progression.
Maintain this structure while reducing reliance on routine contrast markers where the comparison is already evident.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though a few choices such as 'manufactured from' and 'research period' sound unnatural in this context.
Prefer natural Task 1 collocations such as 'energy was generated from' and 'over the period shown.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a wide range of controlled sentence forms, with occasional slips in agreement and duplication that do not impede meaning.
Proofread the opening sentence to correct 'charts illustrates,' remove the repeated 'from,' and punctuate the two years clearly.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
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