The graph below shows the fishing industry in a European country according to four indicators.
Sample Response
The given table illustrates the data on large-scaledata of big-scale industrial ships and small-scale fishing boats involved in the European fishing industry. It is fascinating to see that the number of employees in small-scale fishing boats is far higher than in big-scale industrial ships but has a lesser catch than that of the big-scale industrial ship.
The total number of employees in a big-scale ship is 500,000, which is very less as compared to 120,000,000 that of small that of the small scale fishing boat. The annual catch from the large-scale industrial shipsbig ship is nearly 29 million tonnes, while the small-scale boats havesmall-scale boat has 24 million tonnes. The catch for industrial processingcatch for the industrial process is approximatelyis a marker near 22 million tonnes, whereas the small-scale boats record no industrial catchsmall fishing boat has no catch.
The annual pay for each employee on a big scale ship is about 25000-350,000 £ as compared to small scale ship which is at 200-300£. Annual fuel or oil consumptionAnnual consumption for each large-scale industrial vesseleach big vessel is 65,00065000 gallons, whereas that for each small-scale vesseleach small vessel is 8,5008500 gallons.
It can be seen that small-scale fishing employs more peoplesmall ships require more manpower to catch a slightly smaller food catcha small amount of fish but overall have a a lower cost per employeelesser financial cost and fuel consumption per vesselfuel requirement as compared to the bigger ones.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its broad coverage of all four indicators, supported by several accurate figures and a clear comparison between the two sectors. Its main limitation is imprecise reporting, especially the small-boat pay figure and some unclear descriptions of what the figures represent. Prioritise checking every value and unit against the table, then express each comparison in precise, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and reports nearly all four indicators accurately, but understates small-boat pay as £200–300 rather than £200–3,000.
Check each number and unit against the table and describe pay and fuel explicitly as per employee and per vessel.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical overview-and-details structure, although awkward referencing and a few loosely connected clauses disrupt the flow.
Group the catch figures together and the cost figures together, using clear comparative sentence patterns without repetition.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing quantities and comparisons, but phrases such as ‘very less’ and ‘a marker near’ are inaccurate or unnatural.
Use precise chart language such as ‘far fewer,’ ‘approximately,’ ‘per capita,’ and ‘fuel consumption.’
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, but recurring agreement, article, comparison, and clause-structure errors reduce control.
Practise accurate comparative clauses and proofread every sentence for agreement, missing articles, and duplicated wording.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the fishing industry in a European country according to four indicators.
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