Maps show changes in art gallery

Sample Response

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The maps show art gallery before and after it has been developed. Overall, most transformations have taken place on the western part of the art exhibition, where a number of new facilities have been built, while the eastern part has been left completely unchanged. Additionally, the gallery becomes childchildren-friendly and wheelchair usersdisabled people with wheelchair can visit without difficulties after the changes. Prior to developments, the art gallery had a relatively simple layout compared to its current look. Back in 2005, there used to be a café in the north-western corner, to the south of which was gallery office. South-west was where an exhibition room 4 was located to the left of the entrance and on the right there were three exhibition roomsto the right of the entrance and on the left there were three exhibition rooms located consecutively. Just above the entrance, there was an entrance hall standingstood adjacent to the receptionist. Following construction, the art gallery has undergone the arrival of several new amenities making it accessible for almost everyone. One of the significant changes is the introduction of the gallery shop instead of the café and the shop is relatively smaller than the original caféthe building has relatively shrunk in size. Just below the shop, the old gallery office has been removed, making way for the installationinstallment of a vending machine where visitors can buy some snacks and drinks. Exhibition room 4 in the south-west has been replaced by a temporary exhibition and children's areachildren’s playground. Furthermore, beside the entrance and just under the children’s area there can be found a ramp for wheelchair users. Finally, a lift has been installedFinally, elevator has been available for art visitors next to the stairs in the north, while the exhibition rooms in the eastwest have remained unchanged.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

5.5
Scoring rule

The response includes a clear overview and covers most of the main changes. However, it contains significant directional errors that confuse the layout of the gallery.

Next step

Double-check compass directions (North, South, East, West) and relative positions (left/right) against the visual prompt before writing to avoid describing the map backwards.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The essay is organized logically into paragraphs (introduction/overview, 2005 layout, and present-day layout). Cohesive devices are used, though some transitions are slightly repetitive.

Next step

Use more varied spatial transition words (e.g., 'Opposite this', 'In the adjacent space', 'Parallel to') to improve the flow of geographical descriptions.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some good attempts at describing changes (e.g., 'undergone the arrival of', 'making way for'). However, there are some awkward word choices and minor errors.

Next step

Focus on learning precise collocations for map tasks, such as 'installation of facilities' and 'demolished/replaced by'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

The candidate uses a mix of simple and complex structures. Passive voice is used appropriately for changes, but there are several grammatical slips and awkward constructions.

Next step

Review relative clauses and participle clauses to avoid double-verb errors like 'there was... stood'.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

Maps show changes in art gallery

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