The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle.
Sample Response
The given diagram depicts the lifecycle of a product and the environmental effects across its lifecycleconsequences due to its manufacturing. Generally speaking, most of the seven stages in the product lifecycleseven phases of production have a direct effect on the environment. As is observed, the first step in the product-development processin the product manufacturing is planning and designdesigning Deleteaccording to the needs. Then, the manufacturer starts to begin manufacturingput the materials into action by consuming the required materialssubstances and energy resources, which leadslead to the third phase: productionthird phase - production. It is clearly seen that these two steps have a direct impact on the environment. After that, the product undergoes packaging and distribution to shops and markets. Then, the product is sold to consumersthe consumers. Noting that packaging and sales might include adding covers on the product and using bags for selling it, which surely have a negative effect on the environment. Furthermore, after the product is consumed by the customers, it will have two possible outcomes: disposal or recyclingdestinations, disposing or recycling. Of course, disposing of the product makes it harmful to the environmenta burden to the environment while recycling it reduces the amount of materialsamount of the materials required for production. Finally, feedbackfeedbacks are collected to help the designers in their future designsupcoming plans. Delete[Author - Mo Alaa ]
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response follows the lifecycle in a clear sequence and includes all seven labelled stages, disposal, recycling, and feedback. Its main limitation is that it adds speculative claims about covers, bags, and environmental effects instead of explaining the diagram's arrows precisely. The highest priority is to give a sharper cyclical overview and state explicitly how recycling returns to material and energy consumption and feedback returns to planning.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main stages and two end routes are described, but the overview is imprecise and several environmental explanations are not shown in the diagram.
Focus strictly on the depicted sequence and highlight the recycling and feedback loops as the principal overview features.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information moves logically through the numbered stages, and the sequencing devices make the process easy to follow despite the single paragraph.
Separate the overview from the stage details and group the main cycle, disposal branch, and feedback loop more deliberately.
Lexical Resource
A good range of process vocabulary is used, including consumption, resources, packaging, distribution, and recycling, with some imprecise collocations.
Replace awkward phrases such as put the materials into action and adding covers with exact process descriptions drawn from the diagram.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but errors in articles, word forms, and sentence construction recur, including the fragment beginning Noting that.
Revise fragments into complete sentences and check article use, subject-verb agreement, and uncountable nouns such as feedback.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle.
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