The graph describes average house prices in Sometown in 2005.
Sample Response
Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.
Write at least 150 words
The line graph shows the average cost of housing in Sometown in the second half of the year 2005. It is clear that the prices of both sold and unsold houses fluctuated over the periodhad fluctuated over the period.
According to the graph, the asking price of unsold properties peaked in July at around $335,000$335,000 dollars and then the figure decreased to its lowest level of nearly $319,000, which was reached in September. A slight fluctuation occurred in the following months, during whichfollowing months where the average prices of homes for sale increased by $10,00010 thousand dollars in October and declined to just above 320,000 dollars in December.
Similarly, the average price of sold properties varied widely over the periodhad varied widely over the period, althoughexcept the values were lower. The months of July and August recorded average prices of around $300,000 and $303,000 dollars respectively. Then, prices reached their lowest point at $290,000prices reached the bottom at 290,000 in the next two months before theyit rose significantly and registered its highest value in December at almost $308,000.
In conclusion, there was a significant difference between the asking and selling price while the gap narrowed towards the end of 2005and the gap narrowed towards the end of 2005 as sellers’ expectations moved closer to achievable prices.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The report selects the principal movements and figures accurately, and its final comparison of the narrowing gap gives a perceptive overview of the two series. The main weakness is occasional imprecision in grammatical reference and tense, along with a few redundant expressions. Priority should go to maintaining consistent past-tense narration and making plural references agree cleanly throughout the data description.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately identifies the peaks, lows, fluctuations, and narrowing gap while supporting these features with well-selected figures.
Mention the November values or compare the two series at that point to make the coverage even more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organised into a clear introduction, separate treatment of both series, and a comparative conclusion with smooth progression.
Make the transition within the on-market series more precise by explicitly linking the October recovery to the subsequent decline.
Lexical Resource
The response uses flexible and precise data-description vocabulary, including peaked, declined, reached the bottom, and narrowed.
Remove redundant combinations such as $335,000 dollars and use consistently precise labels for asking prices and sale prices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used effectively, but tense and agreement slips recur in phrases such as prices had varied and before it rose.
Keep the account consistently in the simple past and ensure plural subjects such as prices take plural pronouns and verbs.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph describes average house prices in Sometown in 2005.
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