The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.
Sample Response
The given pie chart depicts the UAE government’s expenditurenational expenditure of UAE on ten differentvariant sectors in the year 2000.
Overall, the country invests more money on social security as opposed to this transportation was the last contributed sector.
In the year 2000, the UAE government allocated AED 100 billion100 million AED for social security, while more than half of this figure was devoted to health and personal social servicespersonal development, approximately AED 53 billionapproximately 53 billion AED. The smallest allocationThe lowest amount of money the government spent on transportthe country invested in the transportation facilities was just over halfexactly half the amount allocated to law and orderamount of money accounted for in law and order.
The amounts spent on debt interest and other expenditure were equalThe money invested on debt interest and other expenditures were similar, at AED 23 billion eachwhich was 23billion AED, while defense received AED 1 billion lesswhile one billion was less than in the case of defense. The government spent AED 38 billion and AED 15 billion38 and 15 billion AED on the educationeducational sector and housing, heritage and environmenthousing heritage and environment, respectively, while AED 13 billion was allocatedwhile 13 billion AED was devoted to industry, agriculture and employmentindustry, agriculture, and the environment.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response's strongest feature is its concise overview, which correctly identifies social security as the largest allocation and transport as the smallest, followed by coverage of most sectors. The principal limitation is data accuracy: social security is given in millions instead of billions, one comparison is overstated, and employment is mislabeled. Prioritize checking units, category names, and exact numerical relationships before describing comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several relevant figures address the task, but errors in units, category naming, and numerical comparison reduce accuracy.
Correct social security to AED 100 billion, retain 'employment' in the industry category, and describe AED 9 billion as approximately half of AED 17 billion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically divided into an introduction, overview, and two detail paragraphs, with generally clear progression despite a few awkward links.
Organize the detail paragraphs by larger and smaller allocations so the comparisons form a more systematic sequence.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary shows adequate range for reporting expenditure, although several collocations and labels are inaccurate, including 'variant sectors' and 'last contributed sector.'
Use conventional expressions such as 'different sectors,' 'smallest allocation,' and 'spending on' consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are both attempted, but agreement, article, preposition, and clause-control errors occur regularly while meaning remains mostly clear.
Review comparative clauses and subject-verb agreement, especially when linking two expenditure figures in one sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.
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