You work as a part-time employee in a company. The company has recently posted an advertisement seeking a person for a full-time position. You want to apply for this full-time job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - introduce yourself and explain why you are writing - express your interest in having this full-time job - explain why you think you are a suitable candidate for the post
Sample Response
Dear Mr/Ms [Surname],Dear Sir or Madam, I am John Vanbrugh, and I work as a part-time Accounting Executive for Rainbow Inc. Recently, I have seen an advertisement, posted on our company’s general notice board, which has asked for a full-time Audit Executive to join your team. I would like to apply for this post. To demonstrate my suitabilityIn defence of my eligibility for this post, I would like to say that I have learned a great deal about the important short-term and long-termshort term and long term financial goals of our company after working for almost one year in my current role. Besides, I have also prepared some financial reports myself under the supervision of my accounting managermy senior Accounting Manager. Regarding my qualifications,And, as far as my educational qualifications are concerned, I have completed a master’s degreemy Master’s degree in Economics with a good GPA. But, most importantly, I am already very familiaralready very much familiar with this company's culture andto understand where my contributions are needed the most. So, I am confident that if you hire me for this position, based on my current role at your company and my qualifications, I would certainly be ableI surely would be able to render excellent service to the company. Yours faithfully, John Vanbrugh
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter’s strongest feature is its complete, purposeful coverage: it identifies the applicant, states the desired position, and supports suitability with relevant experience and qualifications. Its main limitation is that several formal-sounding phrases and connectors feel awkward or formulaic, while the single-block presentation weakens readability. The highest priority is to organise the case into clear paragraphs and express the applicant’s strengths in more natural, precise language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter clearly fulfils its purpose, covers all three bullet points, and develops suitability with relevant professional and educational evidence.
Make the expression of interest slightly more specific by stating why this particular full-time audit role is attractive.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress logically from purpose to experience, qualifications, and confidence, although the response is presented as one block and relies on conspicuous sentence-initial connectors.
Separate the purpose, supporting qualifications, and closing request into distinct paragraphs and use less mechanical transitions.
Lexical Resource
A good range of job-related vocabulary conveys precise meaning, but phrases such as ‘In defence of my eligibility’ and ‘render excellent service’ sound unnatural or overly formal.
Choose more idiomatic professional wording, such as ‘To support my application’ and ‘make a strong contribution to the company’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences are generally accurate and easy to follow, with only localised issues in punctuation, coordination, and phrasing.
Refine comma placement and avoid beginning successive sentences with coordinating conjunctions when a smoother complex structure would be clearer.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You work as a part-time employee in a company. The company has recently posted an advertisement seeking a person for a full-time position. You want to apply for this full-time job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- introduce yourself and explain why you are writing
- express your interest in having this full-time job
- explain why you think you are a suitable candidate for the post
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.