You work as a part-time employee in a company. The company has recently posted an advertisement seeking a person for a full-time position. You want to apply for this full-time job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - introduce yourself and explain why you are writing - express your interest in having this full-time job - explain why you think you are a suitable candidate for the post
Sample Response
Dear [Manager's Name],Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Stephen Traver, a junior Java programmer at your company. I have been working as a part-timer for the last one and a half years, and have successfully completed more than six or seven projects6/7 projects so far. Recently, I have noticed a job advertisement on our company website that announces that the company is hiring a full-time Java developerannounces hiring a full-time Java developer. I believe I am eligible for this post and would like you to consider me for this full-time position.
I want to take the opportunity to apply for this full-time position because it would mean a better opportunity for me to contribute more to our company while also being rewarded for my work here. Not to mention a full-time position comes with better remuneration and other benefitsfacilities which would motivate me to work with greater dedicationwork more dedicatedly.
I believe I am well suited to this postquite eligible for this post because I have delivered all the projects onin time during the past one and a half years and I have developed my skills to a great extent during this time. I am flexible about working hours and can work independently or as a part of a team, depending on project requirementsbased on project demand. I am also a multi-tasker and can work under pressure.
So, I am hoping that you would give me the opportunity to start as a full-time Java developer from next monthfrom the next month in our company and allow me to contribute to our projects more closely and dedicatedly.
Yours faithfully,
Stephen Traver
Why this response received Band 8.0
The letter has a clear purpose, covers every requested point with relevant supporting detail, and maintains a suitably professional tone throughout. Its main limitation is a cluster of slightly unnatural collocations and repeated wording around eligibility and the full-time position; the highest-priority improvement is to choose more idiomatic workplace expressions and streamline repeated claims so the application sounds more polished and persuasive.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are fully covered, and the reasons for suitability are developed in a professional register.
Address the manager more personally if their name is known and frame the benefits of the appointment even more strongly around the company's needs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organised into purposeful paragraphs with clear progression from the application to motivation, suitability, and the requested outcome.
Reduce repetition of phrases such as full-time position and eligible for this post by using tighter referencing between paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The letter uses a good range of relevant workplace vocabulary, though several combinations such as announces hiring and work more dedicatedly are not fully idiomatic.
Prefer natural collocations such as advertised a vacancy, complete projects on time, and work with greater dedication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied mix of simple and complex sentences is generally well controlled, with only minor awkwardness and occasional loose construction.
Turn the fragment beginning Not to mention into a complete sentence and review article and preposition choices in phrases such as from next month.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You work as a part-time employee in a company. The company has recently posted an advertisement seeking a person for a full-time position. You want to apply for this full-time job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- introduce yourself and explain why you are writing
- express your interest in having this full-time job
- explain why you think you are a suitable candidate for the post
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