You have recently moved to a different house, and you want to give the news to an English-speaking friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this English-speaking friend. In your letter: - explain why you have moved - describe the new house - invite your friend to come and visit
Sample Response
Dear Peter, I haven’t heard from you in a while, and I hope that you are doing welldoing well with your life. I just wanted to let you know that I've moved to a new house. And the reason, for which, I've moved to a new house is that I was feeling suffocated in my old house due to many high-rise buildingshigh rising buildings which were erected around my house, which surrounded it on all sidesessentially covering it from all directions. I think that I've moved to a nice house because there are plenty of open spaceplenty of empty spaces around it. Besides, my new house is bigger than the previous one, and it has such a good designsuch a great structure that it receives enough natural light and fresh airnatural light and air from all directions Deleteas long as they are available. However, the best thing about my new house is that it is close enough to the shopping centres and public transportpublic transportation facilities, and yet far enough at the same time from the noisenoises of a busy city. Anyway, I think you'll really like my new house, so come and visit me sometime! Warm wishes, Rahul
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter fully covers the reason for moving and describes the new home clearly, while maintaining a warm, appropriate tone. Its main limitation is that the invitation is brief and the response is presented as one dense paragraph, so the highest-priority improvement is to add a few practical invitation details and separate the ideas into purposeful paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are addressed in a suitably friendly tone, though the invitation receives limited development.
Develop the invitation by suggesting a time, activity, or accommodation arrangement for the visit.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from the move to the house and invitation, but the single dense paragraph and some mechanical linking weaken organisation.
Use separate paragraphs for the reason, house description, and invitation, with fewer sentence-opening linkers.
Lexical Resource
A good range of vocabulary describes the surroundings and amenities, although several collocations such as ‘high rising buildings’ and ‘noises of a busy city’ are awkward.
Use more natural combinations such as ‘high-rise buildings’ and ‘the noise of the city’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The letter uses varied complex structures with generally clear meaning, despite several unnecessary commas and awkwardly constructed clauses.
Improve control of punctuation and simplify clauses such as the sentence explaining the reason for moving.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a different house, and you want to give the news to an English-speaking friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this English-speaking friend. In your letter:
- explain why you have moved
- describe the new house
- invite your friend to come and visit
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