Some people say education is the only critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
On the one hand,One the one hand good education is a highly valued assethighly recommended skill in developed countriesthe developed countries; on the other hand,, on the other hand a major aspirationthe highest wish of many people in impoverished regionsregions of poverty. But what makes education the key factormakes education to the key factor for the development of a country? We must acknowledge that education is something that we all need. The differences are just what we learn. In most cases, the limited educational opportunitiesMostly the limited educational horizons of poor and less educated people are more closely relatedhave more to deal with their personal situation than with broader national problemsproblems of bigger effects on a country. Attending school is sometimes too expensive and it does not feed a family.
Nevertheless there must be a strong rationale for educationa reason for education. It appears thatFor me it looks like some countries have realized that educationEducation is the key for the globalization process. If we take India for example we can see that a change in the educational system changed the economyhad changed the economy of the country. The country has changed from a poor countryregion to a high potential aria for IT knowledge.
In light of this exampleIn regard to this fact it is a must that the governmentsGovernments of less developed countries recognise the power of educationtake the power of education seriously and make it accessible to a wide range of peopleoffer it to a wide range of people. Spending money for education is the key for a new future effects on the economy and social life. All in all I agree with the importance of education for the development of a country. Less knowledge leads to poverty and not to knowledge that has wide effects. Learning and Knowledge is Power and an investment in the near future and therefore it has to be an official task.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response stays relevant and uses the India example to show how education can influence national development. Its main limitation is that it agrees with education’s importance without directly addressing the crucial claim that education is the only critical factor, while frequent language errors sometimes blur the argument. State a precise position on exclusivity, compare education with at least one other development factor, and support that comparison clearly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses education’s value and gives a relevant example, but it never clearly answers whether education is the only critical development factor.
State a direct position on the word only and develop a comparison between education and at least one other national priority.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three-paragraph structure creates a broad progression from context to example and conclusion, although the opening is diffuse and some linking expressions are inaccurate.
Give each paragraph one explicit purpose and use transitions that accurately show whether the next point adds, contrasts, or concludes.
Lexical Resource
The response uses sufficient development-related vocabulary, but recurring spelling and collocation problems often reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations with natural phrases such as access to education, economic development, and a centre with strong IT expertise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but frequent errors with articles, prepositions, agreement, and word forms weaken control.
Prioritise accurate clause construction and proofread each sentence for articles, verb forms, and subject–verb agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say education is the only critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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