Some people think imported food exerts positive impacts on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Nowadays, supermarkets are stocked with food products from around the world. Some individuals are believe thatof the opinion that this imported food has a beneficial effect on us. I beg to differ. I feel that local and regional producethe local and regional produce is better for us and will discuss why in this essay.
Certainly,It is certainly the case that importing food can have a negative effect on local culture. This can be seen in countries such as Japan, wherecountries such as Japan where imported food has become more popular than traditional local producetraditional, local produce, eroding people’s understanding of their own food traditions. Although some would claim that this is a natural part of economic development, in an increasingly global world. I feel strongly that any loss of regional culture would be detrimental.
A second major reason to reduce imports is the environmental cost. Currently, many food imports such as fruitfood imports such as fruit, are transported thousands of miles by road, sea, and air, making these products more expensivethe product more expensive to buy and increasing pollution from transport emissionspollution from exhaust fumes. Despite the factact that international food tradetrade in food exports has existed for many years, I am convinced that a reduction in imports would bringa reduction would bring significant financial and environmental gains.
However, many jobs depend on food exports, and somefood exports and some developing countriesless developed countries may even relydepend on this trade for economic survival. NeverthelessIn spite of this, the importance of developing local trade should not be underestimatedundervalued.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear disagreement and offers relevant cultural and environmental reasons, using varied language and generally logical paragraphing. However, it is under length, contains several sentence-structure and word-choice lapses, and ends with a counterargument without a concluding synthesis. The highest-priority improvement is to add a clear conclusion and develop the final concession so it reinforces the stated position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a consistent position and relevant reasons, but the under-length treatment and unresolved final concession limit development.
Add a conclusion that weighs the acknowledged economic benefit against the main arguments and clearly reaffirms the position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence is generally logical, although the final paragraph feels incomplete and some linking structures are mismanaged.
Integrate concessions into complete sentences and connect the final paragraph explicitly to the central argument.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of topic-specific vocabulary with generally effective control despite a few inaccurate choices.
Proofread collocations and slips such as act for fact, and choose more precise wording for economic claims.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex forms is attempted successfully, but fragments and punctuation errors recur in concessive structures.
Practise attaching clauses beginning with although and despite to grammatically complete main clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think imported food exerts positive impacts on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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