Some people prefer to eat at restaurants while others prefer to prepare and eat at home. Which one do you prefer?
Sample Response
Food is a vital need for our living and people from different geographic locations are habituated to eat foods differently and the menu differs so greatly. Many people are happy to eat food outside the home and they think that preparing foodfoods is a waste of time but to others restaurant food seems harmfuloutside food is like a toxin and they always avoid restaurant foodoutside foods and prepare foods at home. In my opinion, both ways of obtaining foodways of taking foods have some advantages and disadvantages. If someone gets food fromtakes foods from a restaurant or fast food shop, he can save a great deal of time as food preparationpreparing is a cumbersome and time-consuming process. For those people there is no monotony of flaming the burner, washing the dishes, preparing the ingredients. They simply order the dishes and everything is ready for them. Moreover, restaurants offer a sound environment with a varied menua variety of menus. They don't have to follow a fixed eating schedulemaintain a time schedule to eat and mostly they spend time at a restaurant while they are not busy. Thus they can do lots of work without thinking the cooking issue. Cooking involvesinvolved going to the grocery and buying vegetablesvegetable, spices, rice, meat or fishfishes and it is really a difficult thing to do if someone is very busy with work. Restaurants offer an appealingoverwhelming environment to attract customersattract the people. They offer music, a calm environmentcalm environment and better services. But eating in a restaurant is not always pleasant. It costs a great deal of money. Almost all of the dishes cost at least three to four times as much ascost at least 3-4 times higher than those of home-made foods. Foods cooked in restaurants are not hygienic always and as the restaurant owners want more profit, they don't hesitate to cook low-cost vapid foods. Almost all the items prepared at home are cooked with great care and as it's a matter of our health issue, we choose the fresh and best ingredients while shopping. On the other hand restaurant owners always buy low-quality ingredients. This causes some serious health issues. Those who eat at restaurants are more likely to suffer from different diseases. Again, home-made foods are easy to digest and can be taken any time staying at home without thinking ' what the overall bill are going to be'. Foods prepared at home can save a lot of money and considering the nutrition facts I prefer to prepare and eat foods at home.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay presents relevant reasons for both eating out and cooking at home and ultimately states a preference for home-prepared food based on cost and health. Its main limitation is that this position appears only at the end, while the single-block structure and frequent awkward grammar and collocation reduce clarity. State the preference in the introduction, organise the two choices into separate paragraphs, and proofread comparison and count-noun forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant advantages and drawbacks are developed for both choices, and a preference for home cooking is justified, although it is not made clear until the final sentence.
State the preference for home-prepared food in the introduction and make each body point explicitly support that choice.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves broadly from restaurant convenience to its costs and health risks, but the absence of paragraphs and some repetition weaken progression.
Create separate paragraphs for the preference, restaurant convenience, and the financial and health benefits of cooking at home.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers time, cost, atmosphere, ingredients, and health, but repeated plural "foods" and phrases such as "flaming the burner" and "overwhelming environment" are unnatural.
Use conventional expressions such as "food," "turning on the stove," "pleasant atmosphere," and "fresh ingredients."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex sentences are attempted, but recurring count-noun, comparison, agreement, and article errors remain noticeable despite generally clear meaning.
Correct patterns such as "cost three or four times as much," "vegetables and fish," and "what the overall bill is going to be."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to eat at restaurants while others prefer to prepare and eat at home. Which one do you prefer?
Your response
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