Some people prefer to eat at restaurants while others prefer to prepare and eat at home. Which one do you prefer?
Sample Response
There is no gainsaying in the fact that the restaurant businessrestaurant business is flourishing like never before. In earlier days, there were only a few restaurants where people visited on special occasions. But now, we have eateries in every nook and corner of the city; which are swamped with people of all ages. Admittedly, I too like to go and eat at restaurants but only occasionally, and I preferbut occasionally and prefer to cook and eat at home daily. There is no comparison of the freshly home-cooked meal to restaurant food. Every raw material is handpicked, fresh vegetables, good quality oil, and condiments are used, which not only increases the nutrition values of food but is delicious too. We are sure that the food cooked is hygienic whereas we are not sure of the quality of ingredients used in restaurantsused in the restaurant and their hygiene standardsits hygienic condition. Recently in Kerala, India live worms were foundthere were live worms were found in chicken at a KFC outletin chicken in KFC store which is a renowned food chain across the world. On further investigation, it was found that the productsit was found the products used were expired. Many people find cookingfind cooking as a stress busting activity too. Family members can help each other within daily cooking and hence can spend quality time with each other. This way, they can also teach children the importance of home-cooked foodextol the importance of home cooked food to children. These days obesity is a very common problem which arises due to wrong eating habits and eating outside frequently is the major cause. Restaurant food is often fried and therefore contains many calories, cholesterol and unsaturated fathence lots of calories, cholesterol, unsaturated fat which not only contributes to weight gainwhich not makes us fat but slowly results in conditions such as heart disease and diabetesdiseases like heart attack and diabetes. Apart from this, we also squander a lot of money when we eat at restaurantswe at the restaurant frequently; which could otherwise be saved or used for other purposes. In a nutshell, home cooked meal is not only healthy and hygienic but can be interesting too. One can try making one dish in several waysmaking one dish in several by experimenting with ingredients. Parents should encourage their children to eat at home and inculcate the habit of cooking from childhoodright from the childhood.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response states a clear preference and offers a substantial range of relevant reasons, including hygiene, health, family time, and cost. Its effectiveness is reduced by the absence of paragraphing and by frequent grammatical and collocational errors, although the message remains understandable. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the reasons into focused paragraphs and edit each sentence for complete clause structure and accurate word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The preference for home cooking is clear and supported by several relevant, generally developed reasons and an example.
Develop fewer reasons more selectively and connect each one directly to why eating at home is preferable.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a broadly logical sequence, but the single unbroken paragraph and some loose linking weaken overall organisation.
Divide the response into an introduction, focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with one controlling idea in each paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a fairly wide vocabulary, but awkward collocations and word forms occur repeatedly despite clear meaning.
Use more natural combinations such as "nutritional value," "stress-relieving activity," and "home-cooked meals" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is some structural variety, but frequent errors in clause formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation reduce accuracy.
Eliminate double-verb and missing-verb constructions by checking that every clause has one clear, correctly formed predicate.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to eat at restaurants while others prefer to prepare and eat at home. Which one do you prefer?
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