Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business?
Sample Response
Working as an employee brings many benefits. First of all, one can spend more time with one’shis family helping one’shis child do theirhis homework, fishing with the whole family, etc. SecondlySecond of all, one has fewer responsibilities. One does one’s jobHe does his job and does not have to manage the market, competitors, or expected profitsdoes not care about the market, competitors, and expected profit. Third, one on vacationone taking a vacation can forget about work-related concernsall troubles, relax and not worry about who does one’shis job during one’shis absence. Finally, an employee can always find a more interesting job with a higher salary.
On the other handside, being self-employed hasbe self-employed have many benefits too. First of all, one knows the more one works, the more one earnsthe more he works, the more he gets. Another important reason for being self-employed is independence. One does not have to report to anyone except oneselfone’s self. However, alongside these practical benefitsHowever, in addition to these practical benefits, one takes on more responsibilitiesgets more responsibilities to take care of.
To sum up, I think that beingbe self-employed is not as easy as it may seem. A person must be self-confident, strong, and patientself-confident, strong, patient. He must know exactly what he wants and be ready to sacrifice all of his spare timeall his spare time for it. I have a family, and at presentat this moment, I am not sure that I am ready to devote my time to work.sacrifice my time for the job
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers relevant reasons for employment and self-employment and follows a generally clear paragraph structure. However, it is under length and its personal preference remains mostly implicit, while several ideas are listed rather than fully explained; the highest priority is to state a direct choice early and develop two or three supporting reasons with specific explanation and examples in a response of at least 250 words.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant advantages of employment and self-employment are presented, but the preferred option is only implied and development is limited by the short length.
State the chosen work arrangement explicitly and support it with fully developed personal reasons and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence is logical, although progression relies heavily on mechanical listing expressions and some points are loosely connected.
Organise each body paragraph around one central reason and use explanation rather than repeated ordinal linkers to create progression.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for discussing employment, responsibility, independence, and sacrifice, despite some awkward word combinations.
Use more natural collocations, such as take a vacation, forget one's worries, and be accountable to oneself.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but recurring errors in verb forms and clause construction reduce accuracy.
Practise gerund and infinitive patterns, especially being self-employed and I think being self-employed is difficult.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.