Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
There is no doubt that some students in schools behave badly and their behaviour causes difficulty for others either because it has a negative effect on the group or because otherordinary students find it difficult to study with them.
One solution is to remove these students from mainstream classestake these students away and teach them on their own. However, if we simply have them removed after one or two warnings, we are limiting their educational opportunities because it seems to me that a school which caters for difficult students is a sort of "prison" whatever name you give it and the people who go there may never recover from the experience. Such separation can thenThis can then cause problems for the wider society.
Perhaps we need to look at why the disruptive students behave badly before we separate them. Disruptive students may be very intelligent and find the classes boring because the work is too easy. Perhaps these students need extra lessons rather than separate lessons. Alternatively,Or perhaps the teachers are uninspiring and this results in behavioural problems so schools need more effective teachersso we need better teachers. On the other hand, most students put up with this situation rather than cause trouble, and some people argue that we have to learn to suffer poor teachingbad teachers and boring situations and that students who cannotcan't learn this lesson need to be taught separately.
So before we condemn the students to a special school, we should look at factors such as teaching qualityfactors such as the teaching, because once the children have been separated, it is very unlikely that they will be reintegrated into mainstream classesbrought back.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response’s strongest feature is its nuanced and well-developed argument against automatic segregation, supported by plausible causes and consequences. Its main limitation is that the position remains somewhat indirect until the conclusion, while one body paragraph carries several competing ideas. The highest-priority improvement is to state the qualified stance earlier and group the alternative explanations into a more sharply controlled progression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly engages with segregation, develops a clear qualified disagreement, and supports it with relevant causes and social consequences.
State the qualified disagreement explicitly in the opening so the position is immediately unmistakable.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through the problem, risks of separation, possible causes, and a consistent conclusion, with cohesive devices used effectively.
Divide the longest body paragraph or tighten its internal grouping so each alternative receives a more distinct role.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, natural, and precise, with effective expressions for education, behaviour, and social consequences.
Refine occasional broad labels such as ordinary students by choosing more exact neutral terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a wide variety of complex structures with strong control and only minor punctuation or sentence-length issues.
Lightly streamline the longest multi-clause sentence to preserve clarity without reducing grammatical range.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree?
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