Some people feel that in order to improve the quality of our education we should encourage high school students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Others feel that it will cause the loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Which one do you support? What's your viewpoint?
Sample Response
Nowadays, in some high schools students are allowed to evaluate their teachersscholars are allowed to blame their tutors for their method of teaching. Some say that this strategy can improve the quality of training; however, others, including myself, believe that its disadvantagesadvantages outweigh the benefits being earned from this system because teaching will become less effective, the rate of offence will increase and more budgets will be needed for education.
Obviously, I agree withgive a green light to those believing that students should not be involved in teaching because of three important reasons. One is that following this method, the quality of education can drop. Definitely, rules are extremely important for controlling studentscontrolling of students because many of them do not have enough experience inabout teaching, reducing the educational performance thoroughly. For example, had our principal allowed us to give our opinion about practical physicsphysic lessons, we would not have learned the details of the lessonsdetail of them. We understood that our physic trainer had been one of the best ones in this course; however, had we been allowed to challenge himhad we allowed to have challenges with him, we would have missed him.
Another reason behind it is that the rate of misconductviolence can increase markedly. Students feel more freedom in other aspects of their life when their opinions are valued in this area, and their behaviours will become less controllable. This group can become more aggressive in the workplace, university or even in their relations to other citizens. However, when they face some restrictions during this stage in their life, they become more likely to become law-abiding citizensmore probable law-abiding citizens.
Lastly, the cost of education can increase. Admittedly, this method of education will become more costly because students always consider the quality of teaching, while the expenses must be included in the new changes. For instance, if an instructor, having one-year training contract, is prevented by students from teaching thembanned by students to teach them, he will receive the total salary. Authorities usually consider all aspects of education, including finance, and budget.
In conclusion, although some people might agree that students’ opinions should be valued by authorities, I personally believe that this is not a perfect method. With better controlHaving a better control by the administration, the rate of violation among students and education expenses will decrease, and authorities will have a better control on the efficacy of training system.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and organizes three distinct reasons against student evaluation of teachers, with generally understandable progression. Its main limitation is that it often treats evaluation as blame or control and relies on weakly connected claims about violence, citizenship, and costs, while imprecise wording strains clarity. The highest-priority improvement is to address constructive student feedback directly and develop a more credible argument for professional safeguards.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay presents a clear view against allowing high school students to evaluate or criticize teachers and gives three reasons. However, it partly misrepresents evaluation as blame or control, and some arguments about violence and future citizenship are not convincingly connected to teacher feedback.
Address the real proposal more directly: explain why student feedback might help, then argue why safeguards are needed or why teacher evaluation should be handled by professionals.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has clear paragraphing and a visible sequence of three reasons. Cohesion is weakened by awkward transitions, overgeneralized claims, and some examples that do not connect smoothly to the topic sentence.
Make each body paragraph follow the same logic: claim, reason, example, and link back to classroom respect and education quality.
Lexical Resource
The essay attempts a range of vocabulary, but many word choices are inaccurate or unnatural, including scholars, blame their tutors, green light, offence, and violation. These errors reduce precision and tone.
Use neutral education vocabulary such as "students", "evaluate", "teachers", "feedback", "discipline", "misconduct", and "school administration".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are attempts at complex grammar, including conditionals, but errors with articles, passive forms, prepositions, and clause structure are frequent. Meaning is usually understandable but sometimes strained.
Simplify conditionals and passive clauses, then check whether every clause has a clear subject and verb.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people feel that in order to improve the quality of our education we should encourage high school students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Others feel that it will cause the loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Which one do you support? What's your viewpoint?
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