The line graph shows the number of first-time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the commuters who visited and returned from Caryl island for the first time in over eight years.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that the intensity of the visitors who got back from the IslandIsland gradually surged over the years, while the trend of first-time commuters seemed positive in the last few years.
In the charttale, those individuals who visited Caryl Island for the first timevisited IslandIsland for the first time beganbegin at 8,000at 8000 in the year 2000. DeleteUnfortunately, this value plummeted by 4000 after two years. TheSurprisingly the negative trend reversedturned into positive and visitor numbers rosesurged the visitors over the years , reaching 9,000 in 2006.with shares at 10,000 in 2006, Following this amount steadily fairly inclined at touching the barrier of 12,000 years.
Furthermore, travellers who returned from Caryl Islandacryl island began at about 3,000began at nearby in 3000 in the initial year, and this number skyrocketed to 10,000 in two years; it was a substantial increase in returning visitorsa massive inclination observed in commuters. Therefore, the number of returning visitorspace of visitors got back from the IslandIsland continuously soared over the years and this figure leaptlept to 15,000 ininto 2006, but there was a slight decline in visitor numberssmall declination captured in visitors, which fell by about 1,500crashed by 1000 number in the final year.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the broad rise in both visitor groups and supports the account with several relevant figures, so its central message remains understandable. Its main limitation is frequent inaccurate or unnatural language, which sometimes obscures comparisons and is compounded by imprecise values and a weak overview. The priority is to state the two overall trends and their final comparison clearly, then report each data point using simple, accurate trend language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and several figures are covered, but the overview is vague and some values and comparisons are inaccurate or omitted.
Give a precise overview noting that returning visitors overtook first-time visitors, peaked in 2006, and remained higher in 2008.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses a recognisable introduction-overview-detail structure, but progression within paragraphs is weakened by awkward linking and unclear sentences.
Organise each visitor group chronologically and use simple connectors only where the relationship between figures is explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent misuse of words such as 'commuters,' 'intensity,' and 'declination' reduces precision.
Use accurate chart terms consistently, including visitors, rose, fell, peaked, and declined.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent agreement, tense, article, and sentence-structure errors reduce clarity.
Use controlled past-tense sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then check agreement and sentence boundaries throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the number of first-time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
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