The diagram gives information about the process of making pulp and paper.
Sample Response
The given diagram depicts the process for making a slurry, and the subsequent steps involvedthereafter steps involved in the production of paper and the formation of bales and rolls of paper for printing. To make pulp, certain trees are cut from the forest to produce logsfor a requirement of logs. Then, it is further crushed in the chipping wheel and moves to a large container which has to be at the bottom. In this container, the wood chips are combined withcrushed wood is added with some purchased chips and processed in the digestermixed properly. The unwanted substances are removed from the nobe and the formed slurry is passed through the washer for the formation of a pulp screen. From the pulp screen, the clean pulp is transported to a number of production linesmanufacturing units for the formation of products such as bales and rollsboxes.
For the formation of bales, the clean pulp from the industry is fed into a pulp formerpoured into a machine to form a sheet of pulpform a pulp of the required consistency. The liquid pulp is passed through a series of pulp dryersdryer which consists of belts. The wet pulp is in the form of a thin sheet passed through the dryer to remove its moistureto be moistureless. The reels of pulp are made and are cut into the required dimensions with the use of a pulp cutter for the production of the final product, that is paper bales.
For the formation of paper rolls, firstly clean pulp is passed through pulp cleanersa pulp cleanser to remove impuritiesif it consists of any impurities. Secondly, the cleaned pulp is passed through pulp dryersdried under the dryer and passed through the pulp pressespresser. This presser consists of four wheels, among which three are arranged in an inverted triangle and one is between the opposite side of two wheels. As the dried pulp passes through the presser it presses through the pressure of wheels and takes formation like a thin paper. This paper is further passed between two pairs of wheels such that if paper passes it pressurizes for the thickness of the paper. These sheets are dried so that moisture should not be left and converted into paper rollsrolling sheets. These produced products from producers are sold to a customer through shopkeepers.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its generally logical movement from pulp preparation to the two production branches, with most major stages mentioned. Its main limitation is uneven accuracy: it confuses some products and equipment, adds an unsupported sales stage, and lacks a clear overview of the shared process and its two outcomes; prioritise a concise overview and exact visual labels before describing details.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most major stages in pulp, bale, and paper-roll production are covered, but some equipment and outcomes are misidentified and the final sales claim is unsupported.
State that clean pulp splits into rough paper bales and refined paper rolls, then reproduce each labelled stage accurately without adding post-production activity.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three paragraphs follow the process branches in a broadly logical order, although some sequencing within sentences is cumbersome and repetitive.
Use one overview followed by clearly separated shared, rough-paper, and refined-paper stages with concise sequencing language.
Lexical Resource
There is enough process vocabulary to describe the diagram, but frequent awkward collocations such as “takes formation” and repeated use of “formation” reduce precision.
Use exact labels and natural process verbs such as enters, passes through, is pressed, is dried, and is wound.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the main meaning, but recurring article, agreement, reference, and clause-construction errors weaken control.
Build shorter passive process sentences and check each subject, pronoun reference, article, and verb form for grammatical agreement.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram gives information about the process of making pulp and paper.
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