The graph below shows radio and television audiences of United Kingdom throughout the day in the year 1992.
Sample Response
The provided line graph gives information about the percentage of the population who watched TV or listened to the radiopercentage of the population watched TV or listened to the radio during the day or nightday-time or night-time. This graphstudy shows data forhas been realised among the UK population from October to December 1992.
If we first glance at the graph, we can observe that 7% of the UK population started listening to radio from 6:00 am in the morning whereas nobody watched TV at this time of day. The radio audienceaudiences gradually increased to reach a peak of 26% of the population26% of people at 8.30 am. Then, this figuretrend declined graduallywent step by step down to about about 7% of the population4% of the audiences at 6 pm. We can seetruly affirm that people mostly listened to the radiolistened to radio mostly before heading to work or on the way to their workplace. However, for television, the period whenregarding TV audiences the time period where people were watching the mostwatching it the most is obviously between 6.00 pm andto 10.00 pm with the audience peaking atwith the highest point reaching 45% at 8.00 pm.
To sum up, the UK population were more active listening to the radio in the early morning before going to work while they were active on watching TV in the afternoon once they got back from work to before they went to sleep.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest when identifying the contrasting peak periods for radio and television and organizing these observations into a readable progression. However, coverage is selective and includes inaccurate or unsupported details about the 6 a.m. values and audience behaviour, while language errors recur. The highest priority is to describe the complete visual pattern more objectively, including the midday crossover and later fluctuations, with more controlled sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main morning radio peak and evening television peak are identified, but several values are inaccurate and important intervening trends are omitted.
Add the midday crossover and later fluctuations, and verify the 6 a.m. figures directly against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear introduction, detail paragraph, and summary, with generally logical progression despite some awkward connections.
Organize the detail around direct radio-television comparisons rather than moving unevenly between the two series.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate trend vocabulary, but recurrent unnatural collocations and imprecise expressions reduce flexibility and accuracy.
Replace phrases such as "study has been realised" and "active on watching" with precise, conventional graph-description language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex structures communicate the main meaning, though agreement, relative-clause, preposition, and complement errors occur regularly.
Practise accurate percentage clauses and time-range constructions, particularly "the percentage who watched" and "between X and Y."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows radio and television audiences of United Kingdom throughout the day in the year 1992.
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