The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling.
Sample Response
The process chart illustrates the process of recyclingoperation of re-process waste paperthe paper from the garbage.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that there are a total of five steps for recycling waste paperrestoring the paper from waste, beginning with the collection of waste material and culminating in the production of usable paperculminating in a papermaking machine.
The process begins withBegin with the waste paper collected from public paper banks and businessesDelete, which are used by the department. Thisthis paper is then sorted by hand and graded, and unsuitable paper is removed.or unsuitable paper would be separated
During the process. Following this, then a group of sorted paper delivers to the Paper Mill by mode of transportation; the next process is cleaning, during which the paper is thoroughly cleanedin which they deep clean the paper, including pulping and the removal of other materialsincluding pulping and removing other material from the papernotepaper such as staples. In the subsequent stage, the paperwrapper goes through the process of de-inking so that inks and gluesextra glue or ink will be removed. Finally, the paperthe writing paper enters a paper-making machine for the final stagemoves into the last stage for the papermaking machine, and it is interesting to note that usable paper is manufacturedpaper will be manufactured Deleteaccording to the demand for usable wrappers.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response follows the process from collection to paper manufacture and mentions almost every essential operation in a recognisable sequence. Its effectiveness is reduced by the incorrect claim that there are five stages, several unsupported or imprecise details, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors that make some sentences difficult to follow. Prioritise an accurate six-stage overview, then describe each labelled step with simple passive structures and the diagram’s exact terminology.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most stages are described in the correct order, but the overview miscounts the six stages and some details are unsupported or imprecise.
State that the process has six stages and describe only the labelled actions, from collection through production of usable paper.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence is broadly logical and easy to identify, although awkward paragraphing and faulty linking interrupt the flow.
Use one paragraph for the early stages and one for the later stages, with a single clear transition between each step.
Lexical Resource
There is enough process vocabulary to convey the sequence, but frequent inaccurate choices such as wrapper, notepaper, and restoring reduce precision.
Reuse the diagram’s exact terms, including waste paper, paper mill, pulping, de-inking, and usable paper.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, agreement, and clause construction sometimes make the description difficult to follow.
Describe each stage with a short passive clause, such as the paper is sorted, transported, cleaned, and de-inked.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling.
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