You forgot your bag in the gym, and the gym management announced that it would be closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has important things in it. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter: - introduce yourself and describe your position - give them a description of your bag - tell them what you want them to do
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you to make a request to let me collect my bag, that I had forgotten in the gym the previous night. After reaching home, I realised that the gym was going to be closedhad been going to close for seven days for refurbishment.
Let me inform you that I am a regular memberI have been your regular visitor and I have a Gold membership at your gymI have taken gold class membership of your gym that is quite expensive. I usually comecame for a workout in the late evening after workafter my office hours. As a modelBeing a buddy model, keeping myself as physically fitfit as a fiddle is essential. With my Gold membershipIn Gold membership, I am allowedI had been allowed to work out with a trainer onin specific exercises.
Furthermore, it was a backpack and in a cylindrical shape. The colour is navy blue and white along with the keyring, which has a letter of my name ‘G’ is written. Being a leather bag, it is easy to distinguish. Moreover, to verify my ownershipto your satisfaction, I have my driving licence in it.
I would like you to allow me to pick it up from the gym. I want it because I need my driving licence. This morning, I have to pay the penalty without it. In addition, the contract file is also in it because I come straightstraightly come to the gym from the office. It will be a great help to meyou if I get it. Either you can ask one of your staff membersinform any of your workers to pass it to me or allow me to do so. I hope you will consider my requestponder over it and help me out of this situation.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerelySincerely,
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter has a clear request, a sensible paragraph structure, and enough identifying detail about the missing bag to fulfil its practical purpose. Its main weakness is frequent awkward or inaccurate language, which sometimes makes details sound unnatural or confusing; the priority is to use simpler, more precise expressions and maintain consistent tense and sentence structure throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are addressed and the requested action is clear, though some supporting details are irrelevant or imprecise for a formal request.
Keep the introduction focused on membership and visit details, and state a specific collection arrangement more directly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into logical functional paragraphs, but some linking is mechanical and several sentences do not connect smoothly.
Use fewer formulaic linkers and build each paragraph around one clear sequence of related information.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for the situation, but recurring collocation and word-choice problems reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace awkward phrases such as 'straightly come' and 'ponder over it' with common formal expressions such as 'come directly' and 'consider my request'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts varied complex structures, but frequent tense, article, agreement, and clause-construction errors weaken control.
Prioritise consistent past and present forms and practise constructing relative clauses without duplicated verbs or subjects.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You forgot your bag in the gym, and the gym management announced that it would be closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has important things in it. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter:
- introduce yourself and describe your position
- give them a description of your bag
- tell them what you want them to do
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