You have enrolled in an evening course, but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead. Write a letter to you, teacher. In your letter: - Explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course - Say what you would like to do about your studies? - Ask for a device about what you can do about the situation?
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I have been pursuing an evening language course at Trinity Collegein your Trinity College for three months, butfor 3 months; but, now I am unable to continue itfeel incapable of continuing it due to my hectic schedule, and I would like to resume it next term in the autumncontinue it in the next term in autumn, so I am seeking your permission to defer my studiesand for this, I am seeking your permission.
Let me explain the reason for discontinuing the course. Recently, I have been appointed as a teacher atin a school. Though my job is not aroundrounding the clock because I finish workas I get free at three in the afternoon; however, I have pupils' assignments to checkassignments for pupils to check and other administrativeadministration work. It is my new job so I cannot be irresponsible. Due to the above-mentioned reasons, I find it very difficulta hard nut to crack to find enough time to continue this course nowto have spare time for continuing this course now.
To be honest, I would like to continue the rest of the course in the autumnin the month of autumn as I would be on holiday in the autumnon autumn vacations and at that time I would be able to have a better understanding of my work responsibilitiesunderstand my work responsibilities well. In addition, if it were difficultif it would be difficult to attend in person, thenin person; then, I would join this course online.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter clearly explains the writer's new workload and gives a workable plan for resuming the course, with ideas arranged in a logical sequence. Its main limitation is that it never asks the teacher for advice, leaving one required bullet point unanswered. The highest priority is to add a direct request for guidance and then refine awkward collocations and conditional forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and the reasons and future study plan are developed, but the required request for advice is omitted.
Add a direct question asking the teacher what action to take and finish with an appropriate closing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through the situation, reasons, and proposed solution, although some linking and sentence connections feel mechanical.
Use simpler transitions and separate overextended sentences so each stage of the request is easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary shows adequate range for work and study, but several expressions such as 'rounding the clock' and 'month of autumn' are unnatural.
Choose more precise, conventional phrases such as 'working around the clock' and 'during the autumn term'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message clearly, despite recurring problems with punctuation, clause control, and conditional forms.
Improve control of complex sentences, especially by avoiding unnecessary semicolons and using 'if it is difficult' rather than 'if it would be difficult'.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have enrolled in an evening course, but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead. Write a letter to you, teacher. In your letter:
- Explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course
- Say what you would like to do about your studies?
- Ask for a device about what you can do about the situation?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.