You are preparing an outdoors event. Write a letter to your friend to ask for help with the arrangements. In your letter include: - what is the event? - Why will the event happen? - How your friend can help you?
Sample Response
Dear John,
I hope this letter finds you in excellent health. I’m excited to tell youI feel elated to share that I’m organizing a football tournament for all the residents in my neighbourhoodvicinity, and I’d be really happyI will be overwhelmed with happiness if you can also be a part of this event and assist me with some of the arrangements.
Let me briefly explain the eventLet me briefly expound on the event. It’ll be held on Saturday evening from 5 PM and stipulated to conclude by 9 PM. The event will commenceThis event commences with a welcome speech by the honourable Mayor. Subsequently, the three football matches will be played in sequencein a sequential order commencing with children, then male members, followed by womenfemale dwellers.
Moreover, the principal objective of conducting these football matches is to donate funds to impoverished kids. The spectators and players have to pay an entry fee of $10 and $2010 dollars and 20 bucks, respectively. The collected sum will be donated to provide education to underprivileged children.
Additionally, I have taken responsibility for organizing the event entirely. Therefore, it would be tremendously amazing if you could come and volunteer along with me to make the event more successful and memorable.
Thank you in advance, and I look forward to meeting you soon.
Best Regards,
Why this response received Band 7.0
The event and its charitable purpose are explained clearly, with a logical schedule and relevant supporting details. The main limitation is that the requested help is described only as general volunteering, while the tone and vocabulary are sometimes overly formal for a friend. Specify two or three concrete duties for John and use more natural conversational phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The event and its purpose are well developed, but the friend's practical role is only briefly and vaguely addressed.
State specific ways John can help, such as registering players, collecting fees, or coordinating equipment.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organised into focused paragraphs and progresses clearly from event details to purpose and assistance.
Use less formulaic paragraph openers so the progression feels more natural in a personal letter.
Lexical Resource
The response demonstrates a broad vocabulary, although some choices are overly formal or awkward for the context.
Use natural language for a friend and avoid inflated combinations such as excessively emphatic requests.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is generally controlled, with only occasional tense or construction problems.
Keep the event schedule in one consistent future tense and revise awkward passive constructions.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are preparing an outdoors event. Write a letter to your friend to ask for help with the arrangements. In your letter include:
- what is the event?
- Why will the event happen?
- How your friend can help you?
Your response
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