Your car was hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, you need to explain the following: - when and where you hired the car - describe how the accident happened - what kind of action you took after the accident
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I hiredI have hired a Toyota Altis car on 1717th August from your head office in Serangoonhead office located at Serangoon, for a period of 15 days. The registration number of the car is SGT 2345D. I am writing to inform you that I was involvedI have been involved in a minor accident earlier today that caused some damagedamages to the car. I was on my way to my office and at the Raffle Citycity junction, an oncoming cara car from the opposite direction tried to cross the junctionsignal against the red lightwhen it was red. Because of the other driver's reckless drivingDue to his rash driving, his vehicle clippedslightly touched the right side of my car. I tried my best to avoid it, but could not help much. The driver side's rear-view mirror broke and also led to some scratches on the right side of the car. I reported the incident to the on-duty police and he lodged a complaint and informed the other driver's insurance company. I am attaching the police report to this letter so that you can review what really happened and file an insurance claimclaim the insurance for the repair costs. I had the rear-view mirror replaced at a service stationBut I replaced the rearview mirror from the service station as it is essentialvery necessary for driving. I am ready to assist with any further enquiriesready to cooperate regarding this and if you need any further information, you can reach me on 98765678I am available at 98765678. Yours faithfully, Ankit Gupta
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter gives a clear chronological account of the collision and provides useful rental, damage, police, and repair details in an appropriately formal register. The main limitation is the inconsistency between the stated holiday context and the claim that the writer was travelling to work, alongside several imprecise or awkward expressions. The highest priority is to keep the scenario consistent and edit collocations and sentence structure for greater accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three required points are covered with relevant detail, but travelling to the office conflicts with the prompt's holiday context.
Keep the circumstances consistent with the task by explaining where the writer was going while on holiday when the accident occurred.
Coherence and Cohesion
The account progresses clearly from the hire details through the accident and damage to the actions taken afterward.
Divide the letter into focused paragraphs for the rental, the accident, and the follow-up actions to make the sequence even easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
The response uses relevant vocabulary for accidents, insurance, and repairs, but several choices are awkward or imprecise.
Use natural phrases such as 'damage to the car,' 'the driver's-side mirror,' and 'had the mirror replaced at a service station.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the account clearly, although tense, article, possessive, and sentence-construction errors recur.
Proofread past-tense narration and revise faulty structures so that the other car, rather than the broken mirror, clearly causes the scratches.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
Your car was hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, you need to explain the following:
- when and where you hired the car
- describe how the accident happened
- what kind of action you took after the accident
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