You relocated to a new country for work. Write to your previous co-worker. In your letter: - Tell him/her where you live in the new country - Describe how you feel - Explain what you are doing at work - Invite him/her for a visit.
Sample Response
Dear Raj,
Hope this letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spiritsradiant health and best of spirits. I am writing this letter to share some details about my work and my new homedetails of my work and a new place. You know that I moved from SBI to ICICI Bank a few months ago in New ZealandNew-Zealand. I am located in Hill Park Avenuehill park avenue of the capital city where people are kindgood and helping me with many things.
It’s been five weeks and the weather condition is very cold as I shifted from India so it may take some time to acclimatize myself. I joined as a junior clerk atin the bank and workingwork life is very hectic. People are amicableamicably and friendlyjoyful towards me, but theytowards me they are very responsible and committed toin their work so it creates a professional atmosphereserious vibe around me.
I would like you to visit me herevisit here once you get time off from worka vacation formwork as there are many historic and varied placesancient and diverse places that can capturemesmerize your attention. One of the major attractions is downtown which offers many things for tourists and I hope you comehopes you come with your wholefull family so I would have a chance to host you.
Looking forward to seeing you soon! Yours lovingly,
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter clearly addresses the relocation, new surroundings, work, feelings, and invitation, and its friendly tone suits a former colleague. Its main limitation is recurrent awkward wording and sentence construction, which sometimes makes otherwise relevant details less natural and precise. The highest priority is to revise collocations and separate run-on ideas into accurately punctuated sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all four bullet points are addressed with relevant detail in an appropriately friendly tone.
Develop the description of personal feelings more explicitly and finish with a complete informal closing and name.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into purposeful paragraphs and follows a generally clear sequence from relocation to work and invitation.
Use clearer sentence boundaries within paragraphs so that distinct ideas do not run together.
Lexical Resource
The letter shows some range, including less common vocabulary, but several word choices and collocations are unnatural.
Prioritise natural combinations such as friendly towards me, committed to their work, and catch your interest.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message, although recurring agreement, article, and punctuation errors reduce control.
Check each long sentence for a complete clause structure, correct word form, and appropriate punctuation.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You relocated to a new country for work. Write to your previous co-worker. In your letter:
- Tell him/her where you live in the new country
- Describe how you feel
- Explain what you are doing at work
- Invite him/her for a visit.
Your response
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