You are a professional and you are planning to work abroad. You have come across an employment agency on the internet that hires people from your country and sends them to other countries. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter: - Write reasons why you want to work abroad. - Describe what kind of company or organization you want to work with. - State your expectations from the job.
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writingwriting a letter to express my desire to work overseas. My happiness knew no bounds when out of the blue. My eyes fell on the advertisement by your agency on the internet about appointing experts of any field in overseas firms.
First and foremost, my longing to work in Canadado a job in Canada is due to its cosmopolitanCosmopolitan ambience, and one of my close friends livesone of my bosom friends live there. So it would be a great opportunity for me to know about the host country’s culture and working environmenthost country’s culture and work culture.
As a restaurant chefAs a chef in a restaurant, I would like to work in McDonald’s Corp, Domino’s Pizza, Inc, Bloomin’ Brands, Inc.Bloomin brands Inc. I would be able to earn a good incomeearn handsome income and gain experience workingand experience of working in these international firms. I have often heardI often heard that the employees get a chance to work with leading chefsgreat Chefs of the world. This would allow me to enhanceSo I can enhance my culinary skills as well.
To be honest, I have five5 years of experience working as a chef at the Taj Hotelin the Taj hotel and I have also been invitedas well as I have been invited to judge several cooking competitionsmany times as a judge in many cooking competitions. So I think this is sufficient to get a job and if you have any queriesquery, please do let me know. I would not hesitate to respond promptlyanswer instantly.
I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.
Yours faithfully,
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points with relevant details about Canada, preferred employers, and expectations for income and professional growth, while maintaining a generally suitable formal tone. Its main limitation is recurring awkward or inaccurate phrasing, alongside several grammatical slips that reduce naturalness. The highest-priority improvement is to use clearer, more idiomatic sentences and proofread agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are addressed, and the preferences and expectations are developed with relevant detail.
Keep the opening more direct and ensure every detail, especially the paragraph about qualifications, clearly supports the request to the agency.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter progresses logically through its purpose, reasons, preferred employers, qualifications, and closing, with effective paragraphing.
Use linking expressions more selectively and connect sentences directly instead of relying repeatedly on openers such as 'So'.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonably broad vocabulary for work, culture, and professional experience, but several collocations and word choices sound unnatural.
Replace phrases such as 'handsome income' and 'my happiness knew no bounds' with precise, natural language suited to a formal employment enquiry.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the message clearly, though agreement, article, and sentence-boundary errors recur.
Proofread for complete sentences and accurate forms, especially subject-verb agreement in 'one of my bosom friends live' and missing articles.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are a professional and you are planning to work abroad. You have come across an employment agency on the internet that hires people from your country and sends them to other countries. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter:
- Write reasons why you want to work abroad.
- Describe what kind of company or organization you want to work with.
- State your expectations from the job.
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