In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and w riters. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?
Sample Response
In this modern era of continuous advances in science and technologynonstop scientific and technological advancement, artists still remain highly respected worldwidecommand profound respect from people worldwide. There are many aspects of lifeThere are a number of things about life that the arts can teach us that science and technology cannotfail to do so.
Many forms of art, especially literature, can deliver messages about the appreciation of what we have in life as well as life itself. Hundreds of literary works depictchoose to depict misery, misfortune, and sorrow that still exist in many places, and these works send a powerful messagethis sends the strongest message to those who do not appreciate their lives. “The Goldfinch”, for example, which narrates a resonant story about the miserable life the main character led after the unfortunate death of his mother does make each one of us wonder whether we have become heartless toward our own loved ones. I doubt thatAnd I doubt that there are any technologyany technologies in the world that could conveycould manage to convey such powerful messages.
The arts teach usArts teach us to cherish the beauty of culture and fuel our spiritual livesand are t he fuel for our spiritual lives. This is extremely important in a world where science and technology seem to weakenfade our belief in the importancegravity of culture in daily life. The connection between arts and culture is enduringis here to stay, and traditional music and ancient paintings can remind us of where we came from and who we are todaywho we are at present. That is to say, our cultural identity is preserved in various forms of art.
Although science and technology deepen our understanding of the worldadvance our understanding of all things and improvebetter our lives, arts can affect us much more deeplytouch us to a much deeper extent, help us value what we have, and remind us of the importancesignificance of our culture.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The essay responds directly to the question through two well-developed ideas, using a relevant literary example and a clear discussion of cultural identity. Its main limitation is occasional unnatural or imprecise phrasing, which slightly weakens an otherwise fluent and persuasive response. The highest-priority improvement is to refine collocations and sentence construction so that sophisticated ideas are expressed with consistently natural precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response fully addresses the question with two relevant, clearly developed insights into what art uniquely communicates about life.
Deepen the comparison slightly by explaining more explicitly why scientific knowledge cannot create the same emotional or cultural understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are logically sequenced within a clear four-paragraph structure, and cohesion is generally smooth and unobtrusive.
Refine the transition from the literary example to the contrast with technology so the reasoning connects even more seamlessly.
Lexical Resource
The essay uses a wide range of topic-specific vocabulary, although several collocations are awkward or imprecise despite remaining understandable.
Choose more natural formulations for phrases such as fade our belief and gravity of culture, and remove accidental spacing errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is used with strong control, while occasional awkward constructions and punctuation issues do not impede meaning.
Edit long relative-clause sentences carefully to ensure their subjects, punctuation, and emphatic structures remain fully controlled.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and w riters. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?
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