The friends that children have are a very important part of their lives. What kinds of influence may children’s friends have on them? What can parents do to ensure that their children’s friends are a good influence on them?

Sample Response

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An essential part of childhood is friendship, and mostfriendship and most children realise the need to have a friend or two to make life more fun, especially at school or in their immediate communityin school or their immediate community. However, the influence of friends can be both positive and negative, so parents should find ways to ensure their children’s friendships are not harmful to their developmentchildren’s friendships are not detrimental to them. On the positive side, a child’s friends can motivate them to try activities they might not do on their own because of fear or embarrassment. Thus, some children take part in sports or the artsdabble in sports or the arts because their friends are doing the same. Friends are also a source of help and encouragement when things are tough at school or at homethings are tough in school or the family. By lending their expertise or offeringproviding sympathy, friends are a blessing in difficult times. On the negative sideDespite this, on the negative side, some friends can steer a child in the wrong direction. Bullying is something many children copy from their friends until they become bullies themselvesfull-fledged bullies themselves. There are also many harmful habits children pick upvices children pick up from the wrong crowd in school or their community, such as pornography, drinking, smoking, and even excessive video gamingoverindulging in video games. Since children should have a good set of friends, parents must do their part to ensure that happens. One way is for parents to learn who these friends are by asking about themknow who these friends are, by inquiring about them and learning what they do together. Having these friends over for a meal also allows parents to observe and determine the influence such friends have on their children. Another important task for parents is to educate their children on moral values. There will come a time when parents will no longer be able to dictate who their children choose as friends. But if their children understand right and wrong and are aware of the telltale signs that they are being misled, they will know who to keep and who to drop from their inner circle. To sum up, friendship is an important part of a child’s formative years as good friends can help a child develop in different areas of lifebecome better in the different aspects of life. However, parents must be actively involved in monitoring and teaching their children about selecting their friends well to ensure their kids do not fall into the wrong crowd.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The response fully addresses both questions with a balanced account of beneficial and harmful peer influence, supported by clear examples and practical parental measures. Its strongest feature is the precise, varied language used to develop ideas, while the main limitation is that the entire argument appears as one paragraph, weakening the visible structure. Divide the discussion into purposeful paragraphs while preserving the current logical sequence.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

8.0
Scoring rule

Both questions are answered directly, with relevant and well-developed explanations of peer influence and parental action.

Next step

Deepen one parental strategy by explaining how it could work in a difficult real-life situation.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The argument progresses logically through positive influences, negative influences, and parental responses, but the lack of paragraph breaks obscures that structure.

Next step

Separate the introduction, each main stage of the discussion, and the conclusion into clear paragraphs.

LR

Lexical Resource

8.0
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is varied, precise, and natural, with effective choices such as detrimental, telltale signs, and inner circle.

Next step

Refine a few broad expressions, such as different aspects of life, into more specific wording.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0
Scoring rule

A wide range of complex structures is used accurately, and the few minor slips do not hinder meaning.

Next step

Review reference choices and parallel structures to make already controlled sentences even more exact.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

The friends that children have are a very important part of their lives. What kinds of influence may children’s friends have on them? What can parents do to ensure that their children’s friends are a good influence on them?

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