Some people say that the education system is the only critical factor for the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
Everything has two sides and the education system is no exceptioneducation system is not an exception. In the past it seemed like the most natural way of developing a country, but nowadaysdeveloping country but nowadays people criticize it. On the one hand, the education system is one of the best wayseducation system is one best way of teaching students about factors that contribute to a country's developmentabout the factor to develop country. It helps students to know more about the country's weaknessescountry's poor sides and teaches them how to address or overcome drawbackssolve or promote drawbacks of the country. For example, nowadays universities in all developed countriesin all developed country's universities include lessons which contain the country's development plans or strategiesways. On the other hand, many people believe that a developed economy contributes to a country's progressdeveloped economy contributes the promotion of the country. It is proven that in some countries the education system has not improvedin some country’s education system is not increased but their development rate is very highthe countries’ development rate is so high, such as India. What we drive from these facts is that if a country establishes a sound economic systemif country establishes proper economy system, it means this country begins to develop. If a country's economic policy is not chosen properly, thencountry’s economic rate is not chosen properly that it is impossible to develop any sectorimpossible to increase any field of the country, because economic growth will connect the country with the wider worldeconomic increase will face the country with the world. Moreover, establishing suitable policies contributes to a country's developmentestablished suitable policy means developed country. Some countries are currently governedSome countries, nowadays, is being run by true and successful policy, because opposite approach may lead to problemsopposide side may lead to the some kind of problems, such as citizen battles and country cannot afford to stabilise its education system, as without peace it is impossible to increase or choose complementary education. It is proven in many countries or from many years that if one country is run with unsuitable policy it brings to country’s disappearance or separation. For example, in the history it is visible that some countries were separated by their unnecessary policy, not their unproper education In, education system, in my opinion, is part of development of the country, while, without economy and policy it is not possible to support promotion to the country.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response does identify a relevant position and considers education alongside economic and political factors, giving it a recognizable argumentative direction. Its main limitation is that supporting claims are vague or difficult to follow, while frequent language errors blur key relationships between ideas. The highest priority is to build two clearly separated, fully explained reasons with specific evidence and express each causal link in simpler, accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the claim and ultimately presents a relevant view that education is only one factor in national development.
State the position in the introduction and develop each alternative factor with a precise explanation and credible example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a recognizable sequence, but it is presented as one block and several transitions do not clarify the logical relationship between claims.
Use separate paragraphs for education, the economy, and policy, with clear topic sentences and fewer mechanical linking phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is some vocabulary for discussing development, economics, and government, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations reduce clarity.
Prefer familiar, precise combinations such as economic growth, effective policy, and national development, and check spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, possessives, and clause construction often strain meaning.
Build shorter complete sentences first, then check each one for a subject, correct verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that the education system is the only critical factor for the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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