Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
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Biology is one of the most important areas of science due to its direct relationship to survival and health. GivenObserving the rapid advances made, it has been suggested that it is currently the best timepresently the optimum time to be alive. I strongly agree with this affirmation for two reasons, firstly lives have been improved, and secondly risks have been reduced.
First, comparing life with a century ago it is possible to list new benefits available such as hospitals, doctors, medicines, diagnoses, donors, and transplants, all of which were extremely rare previously. Scientific advancesAdvances in the sciences have improved lives across society considerably.
For example, consider an operation in France several years ago whereby a woman received a fullcomplete face transplant. This would be unthinkable in 1910; therefore1910, therefore, due to science, her lifedue to science her life has undoubtedly improved.
Secondly, health risks have fallen dramaticallyincredibly, so much so that it is possible to visit tropical countries that previously posed considerable riskscountries which previously carried considerable dangers. This is because historically, preventive measurestraditionally preventative measures such as vaccinations, immunisation and prescription tablets did not exist.
In addition, over the last thirty years,In addition over the last thirty years the cost of these measurestheir cost has fallen, renderingfallen rendering exotic travel accessibleavailable to almost anyone with the funds. Therefore modern science has increased the opportunities and reduced the risks related to travel; theretravel, there has been no parallel in history.
To conclude, I strongly agree that biology and improvements in science have increased people’s well being and their opportunities to explore the world. This is undoubtedly the first time in history such situations have existed.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay’s strongest feature is a firm, consistently maintained position, supported by a relevant medical example and generally clear progression. Its main limitation is uneven relevance: the opening promotional sentence is extraneous, and the discussion of affordable travel only partly demonstrates that the present is the best time to be alive. Prioritize tighter task focus, then edit sentence boundaries and awkward phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear opinion and relevant health benefits, but one supporting strand becomes only partly focused on the central claim.
Remove the unrelated opening and connect every example explicitly to why life now is better overall.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a clear two-reason structure, though short example paragraphs and some mechanical connectors make the progression less smooth.
Integrate each example with its main idea and use more natural links between supporting sentences.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary shows good range and includes effective topic language, despite several awkward or overly formal combinations.
Choose more natural collocations and avoid inflated wording where a precise common expression would be clearer.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses varied sentence forms, but comma splices and awkward clause construction cause recurring lapses in control.
Separate independent clauses correctly and revise long sentences whose logical relationships are currently compressed.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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