Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other counties have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Sample Response
On the positive side, transporting goods over a long distance gives us a lot of choices. We can enjoytaste a variety of fruits and vegetables from all parts of the world. For example, about ten years ago, we hardly saw kiwi fruit, which is from New Zealand. But nowBut, now it is widely available at fruit standshas a place on every fruit stand. Earlier, we had very few shoe brands like Bata and Carona, but now the market is flooded with Reebok productsReeboks, Nike, Adidas and other foreign brands.
Secondly, many people findget employment in this field. Small businesses have a chance to expand globally and this contributes to the country's overall economic growthit increases the overall economy of the country. Finally, it helps develop good relationshelps in developing good relations between countries, which helps in international co-operation and peace. If countries are dependent upon one another’s economic success, armed conflict may become less likelythen armed conflict would be less likely.
On the downside, importing goods can have a negative effect on local culture. This can be seen in countries such as Japan where imported food has become more popular than traditional, local produce, eroding people’s understanding of their own food traditions. A second major disadvantage is pollution. When goods are transported thousands of miles by road, sea and air, this increases pollution through exhaust emissionsit increases pollution from exhaust fumes.
To conclude, importing goods has both merits and demerits but the pros outweigh the cons.
DeletePlan followed Intro: In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is logically organised, maintains a clear view that the advantages prevail, and supports both sides with relevant examples. Its main limitation is the restricted depth of comparison, compounded by falling slightly below the expected length and ending with an extraneous planning note. The priority is to extend the evaluation of why the stated economic and diplomatic gains outweigh cultural and environmental costs, while keeping only the finished essay in the response.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both advantages and disadvantages are relevantly addressed with a clear conclusion, but the short response explains the weighing of these effects only briefly.
Develop the comparative judgement by explaining why the most important benefits carry greater weight than the pollution and cultural costs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a clear advantages-to-disadvantages structure with effective paragraphing, though some transitions are mechanical and the final planning note disrupts closure.
Remove drafting notes and use transitions that express the logical relationship between claims rather than simply numbering them.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently flexible vocabulary conveys economic, cultural, and environmental ideas with generally appropriate word choice and only occasional awkward phrasing.
Improve precision in collocations such as creating employment and strengthening the economy while avoiding informal shorthand such as pros and cons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of sentence forms with generally accurate control, and the remaining agreement and punctuation lapses do not impede meaning.
Check pronoun reference, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation around introductory linking expressions to make complex sentences more consistently accurate.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other counties have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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