Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?
Sample Response
It is increasingly common in large urban areas for neighbors to interact less frequentlyinteract less. In my opinion, this results in a declining sense of community and the solutions must come from individual initiativesolutions must be individually motivated.
In most cities today, the lack of connection between neighbors has caused less culturally unique neighborhoods. An illustrative counterexamplecounter-example to this would be famous neighborhoods such as Venice Beach in Los Angeles and Greenwich Village in New York City. In the past, individuals living in these areas shared similar values and that led to thea flourishing of a unique culture. One result of such a sense of community was the “Beat Poets” of Greenwich. Related to this is the fading distinctiveness of communities that have value for locals and tourists alike. An individual living in a district in a major metropolis today feels little attachment tofeels little sentiment for its streets, buildings and other inhabitants and therefore develops almost no sense of a shared identityderives nearly nothing in the way of a singular shared identity.
Remedies for the problems detailed above involve individual initiative. Governments attempting to contrive a sense of community will likely only provoke backlash. Instead, individuals could choose to live in parts of a city with a heritage that suits them and avoid contributing to widespread gentrificationnot join mass movements toward gentrification. A clear example isA standout example of this would be expatriate enclaves in developing nations. These communities are able to preserve some of their cultural traditions and arise entirely fromare entirely the result of individuals choosing to live together with those who represent their values and interests. This could be replicated on a larger scale if city residents choose their homes more thoughtfully and are more respectful of the traditions of any given community.
In conclusion, the problems stemming from less interactioninvolvement between neighbors affect the community at large and should be dealt with by those most affectedthose most impacted by the ramifications. In this way, some cultural integrity can be preserved in a globalized world.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is strongest in its confident, fluent development of a clear central argument, supported by specific cultural examples and a logical progression from problem to remedy. Its main limitation is that the proposed solution—choosing heritage-oriented neighbourhoods—only indirectly addresses the broader lack of interaction among neighbours and is somewhat idealised. Prioritise a more practical, directly causal solution and explain how it would rebuild everyday local relationships.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are answered with a clear position and developed examples, although the proposed remedy is somewhat indirect and narrow.
Develop a practical measure that directly increases contact among existing neighbours and explain its likely effect.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress clearly through well-focused paragraphs, with cohesive links used naturally and unobtrusively.
Make the transition from the identified community problem to the proposed individual remedy even more explicitly causal.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, sophisticated, and generally precise, with only occasional slightly strained phrasing.
Prefer direct, natural collocations where expressions such as cultural uniqueness or shared identity become overly elaborate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, and errors are rare and non-impeding.
Refine occasional compressed constructions to make already accurate sentences more effortless and concise.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?
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