The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace but nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages.
Sample Response
Are the benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages! I think that is a seriousseriouse question.So,We need to think carefully and investigateinvistage both the benefits and disadvantages of nuclear power in orderoder to give an accurate and helpfulaccurate helpful answer here. First of all.Nuclear technologyteachnology could be a great result of the dedicated scientificscienticfic efforts in that domain.Specially when it is used in peaceful ways.If we use it in generatinggnerating electricity.Or,for example to run factories and provide lighting for organisationslighten organisation. However,It can be a double edged weapon.Clearly,the effects of the Hiroshima and Nagasaki catastrophesresults of Heroshima and Nagasaki Catastroph are still evident to this dayuntil our days.It affected the shape of all people that lived in those areas in a specific way.In addition to, the distortions of the human genes. Even If,some people said that it decreases the carbon footprintcarbon dioxide print.I would rather look at the mass destructiondesctruction such nuclear wars can bring to our world.No wonder it may destroy our planet in no time. I'm not against the nuclear technology at all.On the contrarycontorary,I'm for its peaceful uses that can bring peace,welfare and prosperity for humanity.It may oneday be able to cure serious diseaseswicked dideases like cancer or diabetes.who knows!neverthelessneveretheless,I think that disadvantages of nuclear would far outweigh its benefits as long as we don'tdont have guarantees about its use.In Peace and safety of humnaity and the planet earth comes first.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response’s clearest strength is its qualified position: it recognises peaceful uses while arguing that uncontrolled military risks are greater. However, the ideas are only briefly explained, and pervasive spelling, punctuation, sentence-fragment, and word-choice errors repeatedly disrupt the flow. The highest priority is to organise the argument into clear paragraphs and express each supporting point in complete, accurately punctuated sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response considers beneficial and harmful uses and ultimately states a position, but supporting ideas remain general and sometimes drift between nuclear power and nuclear warfare.
Develop two specific reasons for the final judgement and explain how each directly proves that the disadvantages outweigh the benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
A basic sequence is visible through contrast markers, but the single-block presentation and numerous fragments make progression difficult to follow.
Separate the introduction, supporting sides, and conclusion into paragraphs, then join fragments into complete logical sentences.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant vocabulary conveys the central argument, but frequent misspellings and inappropriate word combinations substantially reduce precision.
Proofread core topic words and learn accurate collocations for energy generation, environmental impact, warfare, and medical applications.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent sentence-boundary, capitalisation, agreement, and clause-formation errors disrupt reading even though the main ideas can usually be recovered.
Build each point around a complete subject-and-verb clause and check punctuation and capitalisation before adding complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace but nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages.
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