Some people say that too much time and resources are spent on the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Some people argue that protecting wild animals and birds is a waste of time and money. I completely disagree with this point of view.
Many current practices involving the use of animals illustrate that governments have not devoted enough attention to animal welfareinvested enough time in the issue of animal welfare. For example, lawmakers have banned the use of wild and exotic animals in entertainmentfor entertainment purposes, yet wild animals are still kept in captivity for circuses. This inconsistency between law-making and law enforcement suggests that the issue is not being taken seriously enough by those in power. Furthermore, it seems that an educational approach is unlikely to raise people’s awareness of the issuechange people’s awareness about the issue. For many years, people have underestimated the role of wild animals, and many today still believe that wild animal products have exceptional powershold a belief that wild animal products have exceptional powers. Re-educating such peopleTo re-educate such people requires patience and consistency.
In addition to this, resources spent on wildlife protection are still limited. Many authorities believe that wild animal and bird conservation is only of minor importance, and human welfare is a far higher priorityfar more of a priority. This is why governments are not willing to allocate substantial funding and resourceslarge amounts of funds and resources to the conservation of wild animals, which makes it difficult for organisations that are actually trying to make a difference. For instance, in Vietnam, we do not see any sustained bird conservation programmeslong-lasting bird conservation campaigns due to a lack of government fundingfunding from the government, and it is non-governmental organisationsorganizations that currently raise the funds to protect wild bird populationstake care of existing wild birds.
In conclusion, while there is some time and resources spent on wild animal and bird protection, I believe that far more resources are needed to achieve that ultimate goal.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear, consistent disagreement and supports it with relevant examples about enforcement, public attitudes, and funding, while maintaining strong control of organisation and language. Its main limitation is that some reasoning is slightly broad or awkwardly connected, particularly the shift from ineffective education to the need for re-education; clarifying that relationship and making each example's relevance more explicit would strengthen the argument.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout, and the two main arguments are relevant and well supported with concrete examples.
Clarify the logic connecting persistent misconceptions, the limits of education, and the need for greater investment of time.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through focused paragraphs, with cohesive devices used naturally and effectively.
Strengthen the internal transition between the enforcement example and the discussion of public education.
Lexical Resource
A wide and precise vocabulary supports nuanced discussion of conservation, legislation, funding, and public attitudes.
Refine a few collocations, such as people's awareness of the issue, to make expression consistently idiomatic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used accurately, and the rare errors do not affect communication.
Check agreement in mixed noun phrases, especially the concluding phrase some time and resources are spent.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that too much time and resources are spent on the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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