Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.
Sample Response
Some companies make their workers wear uniforms at all timesmake their workers always wearing uniforms. The main benefits of this areis that companies appear reliable to their clientscompanies are shown as reliable for their clients and their workers feel safe wearing them. However, the key drawbacks are that their staff can feel uncomfortable on hot days and demotivated by wearing the same clothes every daydemotivated by wearing the same every day. Companies in which uniforms are always worn show their clients that they can trust them. When employees look neat wearing their uniforms, clients trust the servicesclients trust in the services provided by the companythat are provided by a company because it shows professionalism and order. Another advantage is that workers feel protected. In some types of jobs, employees who work with dangerous products can feel safe wearing their uniforms all day because they prevent them from getting hurt. For example, builders require uniformsbuilders demand their uniforms as essential protective equipmentas a basic element for their protection before starting construction workbefore starting a construction. However, employees can feel uncomfortable onin days with high temperatures. On hot days, wearing uniforms can reduce workers' comfortworker’s comfort because they cannot change their clothes to avoid the heat. Another key drawback is that wearing the same clothing repeatedlyrepeating the same clothing can demotivate workers. Employees can growfeel tired of always looking the same because they cannot choose what they want to wear. For instance, a recent survey showed that 60.3% of people who wear uniforms do not like to wear them, and they would like to make decisions about their outfit at work. In conclusion, although having uniforms for staff makes a company looklooks reliable tofor its clients and keeps its workers safeprovides safety for its workers, they can feel uncomfortable on hot days and unmotivated becausedue to the fact that they constantly have to wear the same clothing.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response addresses both sides directly and develops four relevant points with explanations and examples, making task coverage its strongest feature. The main limitation is presentation as one continuous paragraph, compounded by recurring grammatical and collocational errors despite generally clear meaning. The highest-priority improvement is to separate the introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion, then edit verb patterns, agreement, possessives, and awkward word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both advantages and disadvantages are clearly identified, extended, and supported with relevant examples.
Strengthen the response further by making the examples more credible and explaining the wider effect of each point.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of ideas is logical and easy to follow, but the absence of paragraph breaks weakens organisation and cohesion.
Divide the response into an introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some precise terms, although repetition and several unnatural collocations limit flexibility.
Vary repeated references to uniforms and replace awkward phrases with natural expressions such as require uniforms and work in hot weather.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, but errors in verb patterns, agreement, possessives, and articles recur.
Proofread each sentence for correct verb complementation and agreement, especially after make, feel, and singular subjects.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.
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