Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourism industries. Why is this the case? Is it a positive development?
Sample Response
These days, many poorer countries are focusing their efforts on developing and promoting their tourism industries. There are some reasons for this, and I believe this can be a positive development, despite numerous drawbacks that can arise.
Personally, I believe that the primary reason countries develop tourism isreason for developing tourism in a country is due to the economic benefits that it brings. A well-developed tourism industry creates a lot of new businesses and jobs for local people, and an influx of money from foreign tourists. In addition to this, promoting international tourism can help to improve relationsimprove international relations with other countries and sharecountries, and to share a country’s customs and culture with people around the worldpeople all around the world. Many people these days are interested in learning about different cultures and ways of living, and tourism facilitates this experiencehelps to facilitate this experience.
However, there are a number of drawbacks that arise from the expansion of a country’s tourism industry. For example, in many countries in South East Asia, tourism has been a major cause of environmental pollution and destruction. For instance, most touristsFor example, most tourists generally drink bottled water when on holiday, and this creates mountains of plastic waste every year. Many developing countries do not have appropriate recycling facilities and do not know how to deal with the waste, and therefore, it commonly ends up littered throughout the countryside, rivers, seas, beaches and oceans. Furthermore, an influx of touriststhe invasion of tourists into certain places can disturb local wildlife and disrupt ecosystemsdisrupt the local wildlife and ecosystems, causing further environmental damage.
In conclusion, I believeI would have to say that expanding the tourism industry in a country is a positive development if it is properly managed, and the environmental and cultural impacts are closely monitored and minimised.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response directly answers both questions, maintains a nuanced positive position, and develops its discussion with relevant economic, cultural, and environmental detail. The argument is clear and linguistically well controlled, although the final positive judgment could be weighed more explicitly against the extended drawbacks. The highest priority is to connect the management conditions in the conclusion to concrete measures discussed in the body.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are fully addressed through well-developed reasons, relevant drawbacks, and a clear conditional judgment.
Strengthen the evaluation by explaining in the body how effective management makes the benefits outweigh the environmental costs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through well-focused paragraphs, and cohesive devices support clear relationships with only minor repetition.
Vary the repeated example framing and make the transition from benefits to the final conditional judgment even more explicit.
Lexical Resource
A wide and precise vocabulary is used naturally across economic, cultural, and environmental topics, with only occasional awkward phrasing.
Refine isolated choices such as invasion of tourists to a more neutral and precise phrase such as influx of visitors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, and the few minor errors do not impede communication.
Polish parallel structures and remove small redundancies such as the primary reason is due to for greater grammatical precision.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourism industries. Why is this the case? Is it a positive development?
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