Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
With the prevalence of the Internet, many people think that people do not need to travel to other countries to understand life there. I neither fully agree nor disagree with this opinion.
I partially agree with this statement becauseWhy I partially agree with this statement is because people can watch documentaries online to understand how life is in foreign countries. These documentaries are often accurate and produced to a high standarddelivered with great quality, helping the audience understand foreign culturesthe foreign cultures better. For example, Netflix has recently releasedrecently has released a popular series depicting street food worldwide. Moreover, this option is suitable for those who cannot yet travel internationallyhave yet to be capable of international flights or people who only want limited exposure to multiple countriesa slight experience of multiple countries. For example, if a student is writing a paper on the difference between Asian cultures, he or she can conduct research onlinehas to research online instead of traveling to thosesaid countries.
However, I partially disagree with the statement because mere research on the Internet cannot replace the experience of travellingthe traveling experience. Firstly, many aspectsfeatures are exaggerated on camera to attract attentionfor attention, whether that exaggeration is on the positive or negative directionside. For example, many foreign visitorsmany foreigners usually film themselves eating bizarre foods from that country, leading viewers to mistakenly believe thatmisinterpret that most local people eat that way daily. Secondly, the Internet is full of unverifiable information, so information from YouTubeYoutube channels or blogs might not be sufficient to develop a deep understandingadequate to build a deep understanding of other cultures.
In conclusion, I do agree that using the Internet to learn about life in foreign countries instead of traveling is a feasible option for those who cannot afford tothe travel or do not have enough time. However, I do not think that the Internet can entirely replace going to other countries to experience their lives.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear, balanced position, with both the usefulness and limitations of online information developed through relevant examples. The main limitation is imprecise phrasing and several awkward collocations, which occasionally weaken otherwise clear ideas. The highest-priority improvement is to express the same arguments in more natural, precise language while sharpening the connection between each example and the degree of agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the question fully, maintains a nuanced position, and supports both sides with relevant reasons and examples.
Explain more explicitly how each example determines the limits of what online research can replace.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure and clear contrast between the two sides create logical, easy-to-follow progression.
Use more varied internal links so the body paragraphs develop as connected arguments rather than sequences of points and examples.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but recurring awkward collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace phrases such as delivered with great quality, slight experience, and misinterpret that with idiomatic academic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of simple and complex sentences, with errors that rarely affect clarity.
Improve control of word order and verb patterns, particularly in phrases such as recently has released and have yet to be capable.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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