Full time university students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Full time study in university is a great experience in life but at the same timein parallel to that students become less involved in other activitiesbecome inactive in other activities such as earning pocket moneyworking for their pocket money, playing sportssports, participating in debates and socialisingsocialization. People differ in their opinionsopinion on whether students must engageif students must engaged in other things or concentrate onstay concentrated on their studies only. The discussion will be presented below, followed by my opinion.
Some people say that mere studying does not produceproduct well-rounded young people for a countryan overall youth for a country. This way, students only gainearn theoretical knowledge -- not practical. For instance, students can be intelligent during their studies but at the same time when they enter the job marketcome in the market to work n, they fail and cannot builddevelop their confidence and perform as wellwork as brilliantly as they were in university. Hence, the best approach is for themthe best approach for them need to be involved in other activitiesengaged here and there for practical experience.
On the other hand, others believe that building a better career is the foremost thing in today’s world. So, they focus on their studiesthey are targeted to their studies and gain as much knowledge as they can. Furthermore, if they are diverted from their studies, they will not be able to achieve their goalmake their target.
FromIn my point of view, there must be a balancethere must be blending of full time education and extra activities. It refreshes students’ minds and provides more energy to concentrate on it. Moreover, inby this way, they will learn how to be mingled with other people in the society.
To summarize, it can be said that it is important to concentrate on study but on the other hand there must be something to keep them active and relaxed being involved in games, music, work and other extra activities.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a recognisable position and uses a clear paragraph structure to consider study and other activities. However, its supporting ideas remain fairly general, and frequent awkward word choices and grammatical errors sometimes weaken clarity. The highest-priority improvement is to state the degree of agreement directly in the introduction and develop each reason with a precise, realistic example while checking sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the issue and ultimately supports combining study with other activities, but the position is delayed and several ideas receive limited support.
State the extent of agreement in the introduction and develop the practical and personal benefits with specific explanations or examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear overall structure and generally logical progression, although some transitions are mechanical and references are occasionally vague.
Use clearer internal links between claims and consequences, and replace vague references such as pronouns with precise nouns where needed.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and shows some range, but frequent inaccurate formations and collocations make several phrases awkward.
Build control of common academic collocations for education, careers, and extracurricular activities before attempting less familiar expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy.
Check every finite verb for its subject and tense, and practise forming complete complex sentences with accurately controlled clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Full time university students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Your response
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