The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday.
Sample Response
The given illustration presents data on the sales volume in a coffee shop on a weekend based on four different time-slots. As can be seen from the tablegiven table data, the shop sold four items:four items - coffee, tea, pastries and sandwiches and the sales of these foods and drinks varied based on the time of daythe time of the day but coffee salessold exceeded the sales of any other item. It is obvious that early morning (7:3 am to 10.30 am) and evening (5.30 pm to 8:30 pm) are the time people preferred to have a cup of coffee as the 265 and 200 coffee sales in these two time-slots indicate. The coffee shopThe restaurant sold 795 cups of coffeearound 800 cups of coffee which was almost nearly three times as high as3 times higher than the tea sales in the same shopthis very shop. DeleteInterestingly, demanddemands for tea and coffee around midday wasin the noon were much lowerfar less. Besides, the highest pastries figurehighest pastry sale was in the early morning with 275 items sold275 sale volume and this was the highest single sales figurehighest sale unit on this day. Sales volume of no other item on that day went beyond 275. Despite the high demand for pastries in the early morning, it decreased in other times of the day. Finally, sandwiches were bought more in the lunchtime than any other period of the day. 200 sandwiches were sold in the noon alone while the combined sale volume of it in the rest of the day was even less than that.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report identifies the leading products and time periods effectively, and the coffee total, pastry peak, and lunchtime sandwich figure are mostly well selected. Its main limitations are that the table describes a weekday rather than a weekend and that sandwich sales outside lunchtime total 200, equal to the lunchtime figure rather than lower. Prioritise checking the task context and verifying every combined total before making comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and most key figures are accurate, but the day type is misstated and the combined sandwich comparison is incorrect.
Identify the setting as a typical weekday and add the non-lunchtime sandwich figures before comparing their combined total with 200.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses from an overview through coffee, tea, pastries, and sandwiches, though the single paragraph and long sentences weaken organisation.
Separate the overview and group beverage patterns in one detail paragraph and food patterns in another.
Lexical Resource
Some useful sales vocabulary is present, but repetitive and awkward phrases such as ‘sale volume’, ‘sale unit’, and ‘demands’ reduce naturalness.
Use standard expressions including ‘items sold’, ‘sales peaked at’, ‘demand was highest’, and ‘the total was’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence types is attempted, but agreement, articles, plural forms, comparison structures, and reference errors occur repeatedly.
Use clear count-noun subjects and revise long sentences so each figure has an unambiguous item and time period.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday.
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